help! 英文文法問題

At Last night I guess I will be dead this time. But I'm not yet . Because my dad come back to home when the rope holding at beams and tighten my neck. Yes, while I'm suicide . On My mean lost when i remember my dad was so pale and he was cries my name. But at that moment I lost my mean. I cannot response him.

這段文字是你於昨晚經歷的, 所以需要用past tense. ***
"last night"前不需加上 "At" , "At" 只用於 "At night" etc.
而dead 只用於名詞和副詞, 你想表達的是[我認為我要死了] 還是[我認為我會死了]? 前者就是"I guess I was dying that time" 後者是"I guess I would died that time" 而 "this"應改成 "that" 因為事情已經過去, 你只是回想.
"come back to home" 是常人犯的一般錯誤, 應改成"back home" 或 "arrived home"
rope 和 holding 之間需加上動詞 "is" 改做 past tense " was"
"while I'm suicide" [我在自殺] 第一應先改成"while I was suicide" 然後再考慮是否改成continues "while I was suiciding " <- (這裡我覺得有點奇怪, 所以不太確定)***
"On my mean lost" 是否想表達[我的意圖消失]? 如是, 應該改為"My meaning was lost" 因為meaning 是死物, 不會自己消失, 是被動, 因此應轉成[be+p.p.] = [is / am /are + past participle] -> 轉tense "was lost"
"he was cries my name" 你的意思是[他在喊我的名字] , "was" 已是past tense 轉tense後應保持bare form , 但現在的是過去進行式, 應改成"he was crying my name"
"But at that moment"不用加"But" 因為Dad的叫喊使你失去自殺的意圖.
"At that moment I lost my meaning of suicide. " 後面清晰地表達出來比較好.
"I cannot response him" [我不能回答他]? 本人不太理解固中意思, 但可以轉tense改成" I couldn't response him"

大部份錯誤都在tenses 方面需多加注意, 其中有我無法解釋或不清楚的事情, 不好意思. 這只是我的理解, 有錯也請諒解, 謝謝.

Last night I guessed I might be dead . But I was not dead. Because my dad came back home when I used the rope hangng my neck at beams. Yes, I commited suicide. I had lost my mind before I remembered then I found my dad's face was so pale and he was crying my name. But at that moment I lost my mind again and I couldn't response to him.