Hey would you read this... any comments?

2012-02-20 8:48 pm
“You can drive at 16, go to war at 18, drink at 21, and retire at 65. So who can say what age we find your true love?” Jimmy James

One look at your boyish grin and you have my heart racing.

In the morning I will be standing over at Brandies locker, I take a glance over towards your direction and I wonder if you know what I have held in my heart for so long?

I wonder if I could work up the never to tell you what I have held in my heart for so long, what would you say? Maybe you have had this feeling as well, however, have been scared of heart break.

Once in your life time you will find someone who makes your heart race in a good way, one touch form his soft warm skin and he makes you feel safe, someone who you could stay up and talk to all night long. When you fall in love with someone even if that someone you barley ever talk to, love blinds you. It has the power to control every though, makes you do stupid things they do call it crazy stupid love after all. It makes you not think straight and makes you irresponsible.

The first time we ever talked was on January 12th 2012. You were wearing your green hurly shirt with your light blue jeans that day and were heavy on the boyish grin. The boyish grin that makes my entire day. My pencil case had some how got pushed to the back of my locker and no one else was around that day not even any of the guys. It was if density was pushing us together. My heart was racing, my voice was shaky while my knees where knocking I asked you, and you were kind enough to get it down for me. You had dimples and rosy checks I wondered if you were really happy that we talked.

回答 (4)

2012-02-20 8:50 pm
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So you wrote all of this why?????
2012-02-21 4:56 am
interesting point of view, actually. The narrator is not speaking to the reader nor the desire of her affections, she is simply talking about that person. really unique! i like it, and with some corrections and revisions in a couple places, i would keep reading. :)

answer mine?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AgLcwX9h473m45CnAQuCo8Dsy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20120219145052AApYLJA
2012-02-21 4:52 am
Its sounds good. Yours? If so your good at writing
Answer mine http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20120220124900AAckVNe
2012-02-21 4:49 am
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