請問英文好的人可以幫我改我寫的文哪裡有錯嗎??拜託謝謝~~!
2012-01-05 6:37 am
New YearResolutionThis year to be endsbefore New Year will come. I will become fourth grade in college new year 2012.In news year I have to set up a let object and resolution to finish them.First, in language, I hope to improve my English to getting better and getleast two English certificates. English is important language in the world andalmost necessary on works. So, If I want to get high position, my English mustto become very well. Second, in schoolwork, I decide to get the least fivecertificates about of food＆beverage. For example Chinesefood certificates , service certificates, HACCP certificates, drink modulation certificatesand certificates of baking. My major is food＆beverage. Many people have certificates that morebetter get job than no certificates people. So I plan to take a job to earnmoneys to burden the test expense in the winter vacation and add experience onworks. Finally, in healthy resolution I expect to reduce weight least fivekilogram. Because I'm too fat let my health bright red light, I hope to veryhealth in new year. I anticipates the above-mention three all finish in newyear. My value and knowledge will to increase in the new year 2012.
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2012-01-05 9:27 am
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New YearResolution2011 is coming to the end and soon the new year will come. I will be in my fourth grade of my college studies and set to achieve something meaningful. First, English. I would like to improve my English and receive at least two certificates. English is one of the most important language in the world and for work. This means i must have good English skill in order to get higher promotion. Second, schoolworks. I am looking forward to get at least five certificates relates to Food&Beverage which is i major in, this includes Chinese Food, Service, HACCP, Drink Modulation and Baking Certificates etc.
People arm with certificates could get better jobs than those who don't. That's why i am planning to get a job, earn some money to cover my expense for the winter vacation, as well as getting some job experience.
Last but not least, health. I hope i could lose some weight. Let's say 5kg. I know i am so fat that i am inside the red zone.
I wish i could achieve all of the above next year, as well as my value and my knowledge.
2012-01-05 09:46:40 補充：
2011 is coming to the end and soon the New Year will arrive.
參考: myself, correction
2012-01-05 7:29 am
I suggest when you want to write, you spend some time to research the verbs and the nouns you want to use first. It can help you a great deal! For example: "fourth grade" is for elementary school students. You should use "senior".
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