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After I have read this article,I think parents should not force their children to study very hard.They should let them study themselves.It is because the consequence(後果) can be serious(嚴重) like the students commit suicide(自殺) each year.So parents should help them need to step by step(一步步來).
Education is important to all, without doubts, however, the aim of education is pursue knowledge and happiness in education, in order to form the correct values in mind and have skills to survive in the career market and marks should not be the most important part that forces students to commit suicide.