超急!!!!!20分!!!F.1英文作文-halloween

The page written on the Diary in the night was Halloween.
The night of 31st October is Halloween when it is believed in the past that dead people appeared from their graves. It is now celebrated in the HKOcean Park by artists-workmen who dress as ghosts,spirits,witches,wizards,tricks or treats.
The page written on the Diary in the night was on Halloween.
We went to Ocean Park in evening.We could not distinguish whether clowns or visitors dressed as ghosts.. A visitor's beautiful girlfriend was frightened to death on the crowed road..She had quite a scare. The visitor hit the "ghost" to death.
We were frightened too by this scare tactics of persuading beautiful girl to love somebody else!
Then we visited different rooms in the Haunted House under the leadership of Teresa and Charing Carpio.
They gave us a box of candy to mean the end of the visit.

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應該係:
★My family and I go to Ocean Park the haunted house.
★This is my first visit haunted house to play.
★The "ghost" come to scare us.

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Last Monday was Halloween, on the morning, my neighbors and classmates gave me candy. We had a small masquerade last Sunday, many friends and their parents came, we dressed like a Ginseng, some friends pretended to be vampires, Chinese or western, some pretended the Swan in the famous movie last year.
Then we went to the Ocean Park in the evening, there was crowded, that we could not distinguish the clowns/ art working pretending to be ghosts working there or visitors. They suddenly came out, a visitor's girl friend was scared to death, nearby the toilet of a restaurant, far from the haunted house. The visitor hit the "ghost".
We were scared too. Then we went to the long row in the haunted house, because four different rows had different things inside the haunted house. We had a happy time in park, and got very tired. We left for dinner.

Today is Halloween.My family and I will going to Ocean Park the haunted house.This is my first go haunted house to play.I am very happy!In the haunted house,The "ghost" come to scare we.We are very scary.Today is very happy!

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