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Urban people are busy and stressed at night, so coffee has become necessary, which is the only item can release pressure and make people feel refreshed!

The first coffee machine's advertisement was seen from 1985, which was also the first fully automatic coffee machine. Its main function was turning the coffee beans into perfect espresso,and then from espresso to cappuccino.You may think it is very common, but I think this function is a perfect transformation!

A coffee-made cup form a map, and the upper left corner has a cappuccino machine, precisely expressed the message out , the whole idea is good, but I think changing the background from the solid background into the home background would be better...Since home gives people warm and comfortable feeling , and there is no worry of the place!

With words written “Your perfect Italian barista at home” secretly brings out the idea that there will be a perfect barista at your home, so I think the background should be home, which is more expressive! Moreover, advertising designers put coffee in a more prominent position, and the coffee machine has a good color design, for these reasons, I would like to buy for my everyday hard-working mother...

However, it is a Philips' product, so the price should be very expensive, that I must study hard and find a high-salary job, in order to buy my mother one, for leisure time and life!

Most of the people lived in the City are very busy and that will more or less increase the pressure on their daily lives. In order to release that kind of pressure, people used to depend on drinking coffee as the necessity, whereas coffee can be used as the means of decompression and also a kind of refreshments. Since 1985 the invention of the coffee maker machine which is the first and fully automatic, had been advertised globally that could process coffee beans to become perfect espresso and finally become cappuccino. Perhaps one might think that was not useful, but I thought that was very useful and convenient to apply too.
Regarding the advertisement, the designer had laid out such a picture or image,which shows a coffee cup and above it with a coffee maker machine on the upper left hand corner to empty cappuccino into the cup. In addition, there is the title "the whole is good", but I think the background of the picture should be changed from white into pinkish colour because the latter background will give people with the feeling of comfort and warmth. Moreover, I thought that if the title of "Your perfect Italian barista at home" be adopted would be perfectly barista. With that advertisement, the designer is more renowned for his coffee maker machine. As I'm very fond of that kind of colourful design and would like to buy it as a gift for my mother who is very busy and hard working everyday. ......Although it's made by "Philips" and the price might be very expensive, yet I must work hard to earn more money. Then, I'll be able to buy it for the sake of my hard-working mother.