Creative words help

2011-11-04 10:00 am
I'mdoing a product which need to write creative words.But English is my secondlanguage. Seek for help! Help me correct the mistake or improper sentences!!Barteris the first interchange on the earth. Thousands of years after, people evenstart to interchange themselves and their behaviors just because of the personyou love not nearby.(Actressinner dialogue)Weare a enviable couple.Wemay appear in any one corner of the world, and our story could happen to you.Livingunder the same roof, sweet words and quarrels are full of our livesIlike to grab the mirror to rouge, when you are shaving in the bathroom.Ilike to come forward to stop you, When you are smoking.Ilike to despise your dirty boots. But,finally, you said that my capricious action exceed your patient. Webroke up......"Theboots you left in my home have been staying alone in the corner for severaldays. Their cold bodies doesn't remains any of your temperature. Let meaccompany them temporarily. "(Actress wears her boy friend's boots)"The smell you remained in the house has begun to vanish gradually, as if youreally set out to leave me alone. How can I keep you?" (Actress picks upboy friends' cigarette.)"Theface underneath the shaving foam appears in my mind every day. Last time I sawyou cut yourself, is it already be healed or still aching. Did you shave resentdays? I can help you to shave the mustache." (Actress shaves her face withshaving foam.)Inanother corner of the world, he never smoke again.Hefind her lipstick, and started to rouge unconsciously. (Actressapply the shaving foam on the mirror and write "I miss you")Iwrite down my inner dialogue in the foam. Do you miss me at this moment?

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2011-11-05 3:04 am
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Barter is the first interchange on the earth. Thousands of years after, people even start to interchange themselves and their behaviors just because the person you love doesn't stay nearby.(Actress inner dialogue)We are an enviable couple.We may appear in any corner of the world, and our story could happen to you.Living under the same roof, we fill our daily lives with sweet words and quarrels.I like to grab the mirror to rouge, when you are shaving in the bathroom.I like to come forward to stop you, when you are smoking.I like to despise your dirty boots. But, finally, you say that my capricious action exceeds your patient. We break up......"The boots you left in my home have been staying alone in the corner for several days. Their cold bodies didn't remain any of your temperature. Let me accompany them temporarily." (Actress puts on her boy friend's boots)"The smell you remained in the house has begun to vanish gradually, as if you really set out to leave me alone. How can I keep you?" (Actress picks up boy friends' cigarette.)"The face underneath the shaving foam appears in my mind every day. Last time I saw you cut yourself. Has it already been healed or is it still aching? Have you shaved in recent days? I can help you to shave the mustache." (Actress shaves her face with shaving foam.)In another corner of the world, he never smokes again.He finds her lipstick, and starts to rouge unconsciously. (Actress applies the shaving foam on the mirror and writes "I miss you")I write down my inner dialogue in the foam. Do you miss me at this moment?(comment: the tense should be consistent.)
2011-11-04 10:28 pm
(Actress Inner Dialogue)
I have to inform that creative words on correction of improper use in written of grammar were few but damaged in whole.
As written,barter is a deal that the actress inner dialogue in the foam were written as" I miss You."
Audience should be glad to receive the shaving foam lather healed or aching in Actor in bath room for clean-shaven in their living.
A warm to cold dirty boot representing the value of temperature.
When capricious action and unpredictable personality exceed patient,dont be rough,but the details of the happening should be refined on the ideas.
It is hoped that (an) enviable couple you claimed for publication will be sucessful in the assuring title"Actress Inner Dialogue".
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