有篇文想請英文高手幫我執一執.

In this essay, I will not mention the details of what I have learnt and what I have done during this training. On the contrary, I will focus on my feelings. Certainly, I would like to say thanks to Mr. Chan and Mr. Lam for their effort in teaching us and sharing their experiences at sea. Although two-week-training is not a long period to teach us lots of things, I could completely feel their passion for teaching all their knowledge to us. Moreover, they always reminded us the correct attitude that we should have to become a seafarer. It was the most important thing for engine cadet officer as they haven’t never had any idea on working at ship before. For me, I have adjusted my attitude once I have made the decision to entry this career. I was well-prepared since three years ago when I study Yr. 1 in Maritime School. (So this is not a matter for me.????) (I do understand wt u wanted to say, but it seems to be weird in an english essay) To be honest, the training not only gave me a chance to practice what I have learnt from the Institute, it also widened my horizon, especially joining the tug boat operation, visiting the dock yard, familiarizing the engine room of the sea and going vessel to recognize the daily operation of the engine officer. In my opinion, this was the most valuable part in the training as this could help us to understand how the other departments operate and their working procedures. I am sure that those knowledge cannot be read on books.



Finally, I am so glad that I can become a member of CCo. Through this training, I can feel that CCo had not just treated us as employees or ordinary officers. Compare to other companies, CCo really wants to train us to become future Masters, helping us to develop a path to success. Until now, CCo had not disappointed me and I hope I will not disappoint CCo in the future.

2011-08-26 16:15:13 補充：
I could not promise that I will become a master or a mate officer in a designated time,

2011-08-26 16:15:47 補充：
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(please consider to rewrite the following sentences)

On the contrary, I will only express my feeling and reflections on the training.

I could feel their great passion for trying to teach us all their knowledge even though it was only a two weeks training.

Moreover, they also kept reminding us to strive for the goal of becoming a seafarer some days.

It is a very important message to the engine cadet officers in particular if they have not yet established their career goals. (is it what you mean?- very important to become a seafarer)
It is not an issue for me though, as I have already adjusted myself to have a positive attitude towards my career since I studied Yr. 1 in Maritime School three years ago. (delete Honestly speaking) The training program not only gave me a chance to practice what I have learnt from the Institute, but also widened my horizon as a result of joining the tug boat operation, visiting the dock yard and working in the engine room of a sea-going vessel to recognize the daily duties of an engine officer.

In my opinion, this is the most valuable part of the training because it can help us understand how other departments function and execute their working procedures. These are things that we cannot learn from books.

Finally, I am so glad that I am a member of CCo. Through this training, I realize that CCo do not just treat us as an ordinary employee, but they really want to, as opposed to other companies, train us to become a future Master and help us develop a path to success. CCo has never disappointed me and I hope I will not disappoint CCo in the future. I cannot promise I will become a master or a mate officer in a designated time, but at least I can promise I will strive to become a competent seafarer in the future.

2011-08-26 21:27:23 補充：
"every word you have said is nothing but truth", so don't say something like "frankly speaking, to be honest,..."

2011-08-26 23:32:40 補充：
Be careful when you use the word "UNTIL". In you sentence, you mean "CCo disappoint you now". Replace it by "up to" if you want to stress you doubt for the future; otherwise, drop it.