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I think advertisement is one of the main reasons for obesity. Actually, fast food culture is a product of advertising. Advertising is everywhere. Catchy images, easy and rhyming slogans make impression on you. You must have heard about ‘I lovin’ it’ or ‘Every time a good time’. They are slogans of a fast food chain. As a matter of fact, advertisement is a tool of marketing strategies. McDonald put 1.4 billion in advertising a year to build a good image.That's fine. Your point is reasonable but I will not change my mind. In 2009, a report found that advertisement was directly proportional to the count of people being obese. Therefore, fast food store is not the main point in the film.Do you realize how advertisement lures all of us nowadays? By the time when children in US are able to speak, most of them will say McDonald because of advertising power. Same as US, (Similar to US,) every child in Hong Kong sees 9 million junk-food advertisements in TV each year.I thought I was an innate Fast Food lover before. I have changed my mind after watching the movie; I know that is an illusion created by advertising power. I realize that I have been brainwashed.But now, we can say "no" to fast food but we cannot say "no" to advertisements in our daily life. We say that National education is brainwashing. However, few people understand brainwashing is the spirit of advertising. It is a tricky...

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