我英文好差..可5可以幫幫我改下?英文書信

To whom it might concern,

I am a student who is really interested for SCAD, the University for Creative Careers. I have a few questions regarding on the admission requirement. I have noticed that the basic admission requirement is base on the results of the student's public examination. However, I would like to ask whether the IGCSE (International General Certificate of Secondary Education) results is acceptable or not toward the requirement? If yes, does it also count for the Chinese subject? I decide to take the IGCSE examination in the next few months, including Arts & Design, Chinese, Maths, English and Biology, as well as IELTS(International English Language Testing System).

Finally, the problem that I have concerned the most is whether there will be any other exams that will also fulfill the program requirement if I am not accepted base on the admission requirements of SCAD, the University for Creative Careers?

Sincerely,

Your Name

大致上看得明白的。

只有後部份一些句子文法
And aslo IELTS( International English Language Testing System ) as well.
這句不是完整句(冇verb)，可以把前句一起改為：
I will take the IGCSE examination in the next few months, which includes Arts& Design, Chinese,Maths, English and Biology, and I will also(留意串字) take the IELTS( International English Language Testing System ) as well.

But the biggest problems is that I'm very worried about if it not acceptable for the admission requirements of SCAD,the University for Creative Careers.

Are there any other exams [that are] acceptable (/required) for admission besides above mentioned? [xxx]可有可無的，另外我會用required.