英文作文既煩惱 help!

第一樣野係，要寫得四平八穩。錯得少，睇文o既人睇得舒服同快，唔駛成日估你寫乜，呢個係起碼要求。有趣，有 style 係高一級o既。當然，唔離題係先決條件啦。
要有趣，故事創作時最基本就係文章情節要有ｄ心思；如果係敍事描寫文，就要令描寫豐富（唔一定要用深字）。要有 style 就更難，你要真係由寫作中 develop 一個 style 出o黎，另一方法係日常睇得多英文文章，令自己耳濡目染下 pick up 一種 style。以下求其作一小段故事，唔用深字：


The sky was dark. Alone and afraid, Pete walked along this track. He had been walking for more than two hours without seeing any people, house, or lamp post. Even bats or insects seemed to dislike this track. Other than his own steps and songs, he had not heard anything -- except the pounding of his heart.


"How stupid am I! Why did I agree to come here?" Pete asked himself for the umpteenth time. But he knew he didn't really have options.


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我用o既字我諗除左 umpteenth 之外都冇乜邊個深啦。但係你可以睇到o既，係句式變化，運用分段、對話／說話，增加文章變化，呢ｄ都可以令文章較有特色同趣味。


即係話要寫得好睇，除左識字要多，可以用不同字講同一樣野，仲要多學句式（如 relative clauses, participle clauses），多運用，咁就唔駛句句都 I can ... , This is... 咁簡單。

你可以嘗試下,
加入多一D既形容詞,
加入多一D既such us等等個D之類既野,,,
咁如果講FD方面,
你可以講3-5個人名出黎,,
你可以用多D唔同既技巧,
包括之前中學/小學學過既野
咁老師就知你識學而至用,
咁就會較高分

by 草蚊