請好心人幫我改下D文法丫,因為for見工用...thx !!

I expect to learn more about how to deal with different types of customers in a global luxurious brand and I also look forward to gaining an greater career opportunities.(我改左後半部,用seek唔係太適合,look forward to係詞組,依度個''to''係介詞,後面一係放名詞,一係放 +ing,我揀左gain(獲得)依個verb,所以係gaining,即係''我同時也盼望能得到一個更好的機會'')

I can interact my colleagues when facing prombles because i am a positive and self-motivated person.(我覺得咁改會簡潔好多但又表達到想講既意思)
Also,i can provide exellent service and selling skill(skill會好d,因為skill係專門指某一種技術) to satisfy different level of customers. I will seize every chance/opportunity. (seize chance/opportunity係解抓住某機會,好好利用某機會) I won't disappoint you.(disappoint依度用作動詞,即係"唔會令你失望").

My interests are watching movies and traveling because they can made me feel relaxed .Especially when traveling, I can forget all the pressure to enjoy every moment. It also provides me energy for facing any new challenges.
Besides,(唔好成日淨係用also,用吓第二d意思一樣嘅詞,會豐富d) when i feel free,i like hanging out with my friends to go shopping and having drinks because i am a very out-going and talkative person.

我發覺你果d有because係入面既句子都會加逗號,例如i want to eat,because i am hungry,依句咁,記住 ______ because_____.依種句式係唔洗加逗號架!

2011-04-28 06:57:16 補充：
我覺得你淨係識用also,唔好一篇文入面淨係得1個also去表達[也,都,亦是]依個意思..
除左我講既besides之外,你仲可以用as well架!
例如It provides me energy as well. 咁咪唔洗成日淨係用i also咁囉^^....hope can help u~

*What do you expect to accomplish here? I expect to learn more about how to deal with different types of customers in a global luxurious brand and look forward to greater career opportunities.*What qualities can you bring to this job?I can inspire my colleagues when facing prombles, because I have a positive attitude to different challenges and I am also a self-motivated person. Also I can provide exellent
customer services and selling techniques to satisfy a great variety of customers. I am very confident that I will grasp every single chance. I will never let you down.

*What are u interst in?My interest are watching movies and traveling. Because they can make me feel relax ... especially when traveling, I can forget all the pressure to enjoy every moment. It also help supply me with energy to confront any new challenges. Also when I feel free, I like hanging out with my friends to go shopping and have drinks, because I am a very out-going and talkative person.


2011-04-25 17:06:52 補充：
I have checked the gramma.
However, I personally think the answer to the third question somehow gives me the feeling that you are not a very serious person and do not have great prospect of the job...well, that's just my own comment.