英文作文(1)請求狠評 (urgent)

The letter is well written. I can only suggest some pointers.

1. Syntax correction:

Teacher may also need to spend time punishing misbehaved students.

(Is it always a punishment ? Not necessarily! It can just be a telling off. )

Teacher may also need to spend time dealing with misbehaving students.

2. Some grammar and writing style correction:

Furthermore, ......relationship between the children and themselves

These are the reasons why I am in favour of it.

AbcDef,

Can't you simplify the first sentence of the third paragraph by beginning with
" Homeschooling/Home teaching further improves the relationship between
parents and their children as there is......." , just to cite one example.

1冇乜,
if many students are absent啱d,好過when
spend time on punishing
20好過twenty,過10都寫數字
2有反問句,都幾句.
3正確

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