請問英文達人,這段英文有文法錯誤嗎?若有可以幫我修改一下嗎

若本人使用翻譯機／軟體來翻譯全文，　本人不得好死！！！！！！！！！

您的原意應該是：
為了讓孩子們在英語語言學習的一部分，添加一種顏色，我們將在3/ 30（三）上午九時，舉行歌唱比賽在我們的幼兒園，這個活動，因為這是第一次舉辦，子組，主要是希望所有的孩子都能參與感，通過這樣的比賽，增加孩子的學習精力，孩子也喜歡英語。

我的翻譯：
In order to enhance more fun of learning English for the kids, we are holding a singing contest on 30th March at 9a.m. in our kindergarten. There are two groups divide into Sub group and Main group. We aim at the strengthen confident to use English for the kids; Moreover, we encourage the kids to learn English in a funny way.

由於中英文化有別，　我有加以潤飾，　我把這是我們第一次舉辦省掉了，　這比較切合英文的用法.


住在澳洲的我

2011-02-21 03:58:50 補充：
Sorry, 忘了。。。。我們將在3/ 30（三）上午九時

應該是: We are holding a singing contest on 30th of March (Wednesday) at 9:00 a.m.

2011-02-21 03:59:57 補充：
打太快。。。。。。There are two groups（which）divide into Sub group and Main group. We aim at the strengthen confident to use English for the kids;

英文原意不明, 還是先用中文解釋一下想說什麼吧.

2011-02-21 15:55:21 補充：
Add a color 意義不明,
逗點亂用, 語句破碎
祈願與現狀敘述語句未區分...

心晨 最後一個字是 competition

其他兩位大大的文法好像都不對

沒有中文原文嗎?

In order to teach children language learning in English, a singing competition will be held at 9:00AM, 3/30, in our kindergarten. As this event is held for the first time, we, sub groups, mainly hope that all children can feel involved, and enhance their enthusiasm in learning English through the copetition.

In order to give the children in the English part of language learning , Adding a color . We will be 3/30 ( 三) 9:00AM, holding a Singing Competition in our kindergarten. This activity , because it is held for the first time , sub groups , mainly hope that all children can feel involved , through many competitions , increaseing children's learning energy , children also love English .

貴幼稚園為推廣兒童英語教育,也該加強師資陣容吧!

可否請樓主把中文原文一併貼出來 ?