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I had a memorable journey with my parents in Macau. As we travelled to Macau in spring, so, we felt very comfortable. We went to the Ruins of Pauls. It was so wonderful but it was very old. In the lunch time, we went to a Portugal restaurant. Luckily, all the waiters were Chinese hence we were able to communicate with them. After lunch, we went to the Leal Senado Square. There were many circle shapes on the floor. I thought that they were interesting. At night, we went to the Macau Tower and had a buffet dinner. The top part of the Macau Tower was rotating. During the buffet, we ate a big lobster, it was very delicious. The view of Macau was very attractive. I hope I can visit Macau again.

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I had a memorable journey with my parents in Macau. We went
to Macau in spring. The weather was fine and we (唔要 - So, we ) felt very comfortable. We went to the
Ruins of Pauls. It was so wonderful but (唔要~it was ) very old. At the lunch time, we went to a Portugal restaurant. Fortunately (唔要~Lucky, ) all the waiters (唔要~also) were Chinese.
After lunch, we went to the Leal senado Square. There were many circle shape tiles on floor. I thought they were interested.
At night, we went to the Macau Tower and had a buffet dinner.
The top floor of Macau Tower was rotated (唔要~was rotating.) During our (唔要~At the) buffet , we share (唔要~ate) a big lobster together. Macau's view was very attactive. (唔要~attraction.)
I hope I can go to Macau again.





2011-02-13 01:12:23 補充：
There were many circle shape tiles on floor. I thought they were interested......改為. There were many circle shape tiles on floor. I thought they were very ineresting.

I had a memorable journey with my parents in Macau. We went
to Macau in spring. So, we felt very comfortable. We went to the
Ruins of Pauls. It was (very) wonderful but it was very old. At the lunch time, we went to a Portugal restaurant. (Luckily), all the waiters (were also) Chinese.
After lunch, we went to the Leal senado Square. There were (a lot of) circle (shapes) on (the) floor. I thought they were (interesting).
At night, we went to the Macau Tower and had a buffet dinner.
The top of Macau Tower was rotating. (During) the buffet, we ate a big lobster together. Macau's view was very (attractive).
I hope I can go to Macau again.
P.S. 如果用so的話 就會跟that 所以用very好D
你應該用副詞 所以要變luckily
also應該要擺係動詞後面 所以係were also
通常many係用係否定句(negative)而你個句係肯定句(positive) 用a lot of好ｄ
a lot of=好多 所以後面ge動詞要變複數(plural) 加ｓ呀
因為你指緊Leal senado Square的floor　係指定的 要加the
如果個形容詞指人的心情就加ed 如果指物件or事件就加ing e.g. bored形容一個人感到沉悶 而boring就形容件事好沉悶
During＝當 用at the buffet怪怪地
attraction係名詞(noun) 你宜家形容緊澳門的景色 所以要用adjective(形容詞)

2011-02-12 22:26:01 補充：
我幾肯定我改得對的^V^ 你可以參考下>

So can't put in the front of a sentence. You should use therefore or Hence.

is were also, not also were

should use interesting, not interested. Interested means your feeling and interesting means something

is attractive, not attraction

內容寫得不錯。但要check

I had a memorable journey with my parents in Macau . We went
to Macau in spring. So, we felt very comfortable. We went to the
Ruins of Pails. It was so wonderful but it was very old. At the lunch time, we went to a Portugal restaurant. Lucky, all the waiters also were Chinese.
After lunch, we went to the Leal seadog Square. There were many circle shape on floor. I thought they were interested.
At night, we went to the Macau Tower and had a buffet dinner.
The top of Macau Tower was rotating. At the buffet, we ate a big lobster together. Macau 's view was very attraction.
I hope I can go to Macau again.

有兩.三句我唔係幾明既...

幸運的是，所有的服務員也被中。(中d咩?)

我以為他們有興趣。(以為邊個有咩興趣?係有前因以致到有後果?可以加埋上去)

澳門的看法是非常的吸引力。(同埋你可以加埋你對澳門看法)

大致上都冇咩大問題!!

第4行:唔好also were,,用were also順口d
加多少少感想講下你好enjoy咁都得