有一段英文想大家幫我改grammar

首先TENSE你都知應該全部用past，所以首先自己可以check下有邊個verb不是past tense: want(ed), want(ed),[有些want的意思是用錯的], am(was) punished, need(ed).

再基本一點unlucky是un-字，a應該是要an的。An Unlucky Day.

不過除了tense，句子的結構你也要先掌握一些基本，在這裏很難講明白的。例如：Today was a(n) unlucky...並不是完整句子，你一是把這句改為Today was very unlucky 或 Today was an unlucky day for me.等完整句式的寫法。當然我會選用前者，因為不會重複"day"兩次。

其他的容內太難給你每句地改，你參考其他人的回答提示吧！我反而會把你的內容意思作一段給你看看可以簡而清地寫一些短句便可說出你的故事。

Today was very unlucky. First, my sister came back from America, so I've to give up my room for her. This happened so suddenly because she didn't announce her return and my mother didn't tell me until this morning. Second, when I took the bus to school, I left my wallet at home and had no money or Otopus card to pay the fare. Then, I was late to arrive at school and I was being punished by Miss Fong without a ressess and needed to do a book report. Today I was unlucky at home, on the road and at school; it was a totally unlucky day.

A unlucky day
Today was an unlucky day for me everywhere . I am told that my sister was coming back from American in the morning. I have to return my sister's bedroom to her. (其實我係想間房要比返佢,但係唔識寫). (我呢句係想寫呢件事發生得太突然,係我英文唔識寫出黎).

When I was on my way to the bus- stop, I found that I have forgotton my wallet so went home to get it.

I was then late for school so was punished by Miss Fong. I did not have the recess because I had to do the reading report .Today was an unlucky day for me.

An should be used when a noun or adjective starting with A, E, I , O & U.

An unlucky day
It was an unlucky day whether at home, on the street or in school.

Something occured at my house in the morning. My sister suddenly returned home from the States, which i had no knowledge of. As as result, i had to return my room to her. (please add why it was bad)

It only occured to me that i left my wallet(s) behind when it was my turn to pay the bus fare. So i had no choice but to go home and retrieve it. Needness to say, i was awfully late for school.

I was punished by Miss Fong, my class teacher, for my lateness. As for the punichment, i had to do an extra reading report(?).

Today was such an unlucky day.

Grammatical altered articleIt was an unlucky day whether in school, in street or in home. In the morning, there was something happened which related to my sister. As my sister wanted to back to USA, my room needed to return to her. After that, when I was in the bus, I forgot to bring my wallets, as a result, I went to home to get back my wallets. Eventually, this caused me late for my school. While I was in my school, I was punished by Miss Fong and could not enjoy my due to my reading report. Therefore, In conclusion, today was very unfortunate for me. Remark: In fact, I cannot get what you meant about the incident happened in your home.

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