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hkcee 2010 long task 2 "Facebook has changed my life"

Dear Editor,
Now a days,internet development is developing so fast. Meanwhile,the most
influential communicate tools whomore than 500million uses in the world-facebook.It's apperance has changed a lots of people life.it also give me a positive change in my life.
fristly,facebook is immedicate communication tools. you can communicate with your friend wherever or whenever.so I always use facebook to talk with my
classmate and friends.sometime,i will sharing my photo at facebook,let other
people can meet me.Facebook-improve my friendship and meet friends approach.
then.thanks to facebook ,i start to concern society issues.in facebook, people can make a group to evoke other people to concern the problem.it also
can used for against something.for example,the 80's teenager make a group to against for 60 billion to construct high-railway.now i always find the hot issues at facebook and added my feelings on the broad.facebook-let me start to concern my society ,even the world.
At facebook,i am not only communicate with my friends,but also try to talk with foreign people.Hence i must use english to discuss.so,i determine to improve my english.also,the special bonus is my english writing skills has improved rapidly through facebook.what a surprise!
ayway,facebook has changes my life,because of facebook,my life has changed to be more wealth and more meaningful!

Your faithfully,
chris wong


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