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The topic is “Macao has experienced amazing economic growths (經濟成長都是依年度來計算，故使用複數)since 2002”. Along with these growths had come brought threats to the environment and to Macao's cultural heritage, Discuss there are three specific actions discussed by the government and people, which can take to maintains a balance between the economic development and the protection of Macao's environment and cultural heritage.

What qualities attract people to want to live in a particular city? I think there are three ㊣ right points are so important, below is are my descriptions:The first thing is steadying(steady於此處是動詞，不可直接加於be動詞後) economic development. In the best a perfect city, everyone whose people should be able to get a steady stable jobs and incomes, That which is a basic condition for life living. If there are thousands of unemployed people in the city, every citizen and they can’t pay for afford to pay their living expenses that means that city doesn’t adapt for living to the lives of people. Thus, in the best a perfect city must have steady economic development. The second thing is no discrimination, in spite of the difference between races, nationality, age, religion or and so on, we must be fair to deal with treat everyone, That which is basic human right. If there is any sort of discrimination in the city, any citizen must feel awful, uncomfortable, nervousness and etc. Thus, in the best a perfect city should don’t have there is no any sort of discrimination. Last but not least, this is establishing a comfortable living environment. That which means the aspects achievements of the protection of a city’s environment, pollution reduction, legislation of non-smoking law and so on etc., for example, every visitor many people who have been gone to HK but don’t like this city, because the air pollution at there is so serious, they can’t help it. Thus, in the best a perfect city,

2011-01-06 15:51:23 補充：
its government has to devote efforts to protect the environment it own to curb any kind of pollution. In sum, no discrimination, establishing a comfortable environment, steadying economic development are the essential three points for a perfect city.

2011-01-06 15:51:36 補充：
Finally, I want to ask readers one question, do you think there are three points in Macau, I think there are 2 points in Macau (why? 前面已確實列出”無歧視”、”建立舒適環境”及”穩定經濟發展”3項，如果認為只有2項，應有後續說明。), but for the protection of the environment, the government must adopts some measures to enhance it.

2011-01-06 16:15:45 補充：
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