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This is an adventure film. This film is about one powerful man Harry Potter. When he was a baby, his parents died in order to protect him. The killer is Voldemort. But Voldemort did not kill Harry, leaving only a scar on Harry's forehead. So, Harry and Voldemart are related to some kind of strange relationship. When Harry was eleven years old, he went to Hogwar school to learn magic. In school, he knew two good friends: Ron weasly and Hermione Granger. They accidentally knew the location of the Philosopher Stone. Harry and his two partners overcame many difficulties and finally found the Philosopher Stone and the inmates. In this film, Harry Potter and Voldemort was played by Daniel Radcliffe and Ralph Fiennes respectively. The director is Chris Columbus. Chris Columbus is a famous director. He created a lot of famous movies, like "Harry Potter and the Philosopher Stone" and "Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets". I like this film because I love Harry and Ron Weasly. Harry is a strong and brave boy; he can overcome many difficulties. I hope I can learn the strengths of him. Ron Weasly is a funny boy who always does something to make us smile. I have seen this film three times. But I first saw this film in the Mong Kok cinema with my best friends.

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This is an adventure film. This film was about one powerful boy Harry Potter, when he was a baby,his parents died in order toprotect him. The killer was Voldemort. But Voldemort did not kill Harry, leaving only a scar on his forehead. So Harry and Voldemort were bonded in some kind of strange relationship. When Harry became eleven years old, he went to Hogward school to learn magic. In the school he had two good friends, Ron Weasly and Hermione Granger. They accidentally found the locktion of the Philosopher Stone. Harry and his two companions overcame many difficulties and finally found the Philosopher Stone and the inmates. In this film, Harry Potter and Voldemort was played by Daniel Radcliffe and Ralph Fiennes, the director(?) was Chris Columbus. Chris Columbus is a famous director. He created a lot of famous movies, lsuch as <and the Philosopher Stone>> and < Chamber of Secrets>> I like this film becaues I love the characters Harry and Ron Weasly, Harry is a strong and brave boy who can overcome many difficulties. I hope I can learn to be like him.[advantage的意思不是這樣用的] Ron Weasly is a funny boy, he always does some thing to make us smile. I saw this film [] three times,I frist saw it [] in a Mong Kok cinema with my best friends. [this film在同一句不用重寫，你要學懂何時用代名詞]