A short email in English?

2010-12-22 11:13 am
The following is an email of a landlord to his tenant about a third person living in the flat. Could you help me to improve it?

Dear [tenant's name],
We are writing to inform you that, following the reduction of power supply which occurred last summer as a consequence of the late payments, the electric company (Enel) requires a new contract to be signed. This is a part of the standard reactivation procedure in such cases. Presently supply takes place under a temporary contract. The new contract must anyway be signed by us, after which we might put it in your name (e.g. if you would be interested in paying the bills by direct debit or by credit card). The charges, including a security deposit, are € , .
Besides, since [date] we are paying the telephone bills, as [tenant's friend] refuses to do so on the grounds that she is not using the telephone or internet. Of course, if you prefer, we may choose to terminate the contract with the telephone company (Wind), which is presently in our name.
We would appreciate your immediate attention to these matters.
Sincerely yours,

[landlord]
更新1:

I'm not asking for an answer to this letter, I only would like to correct the mistakes in it and to put it in a better style.

更新2:

Thank you for your prompt and helpful answers.

回答 (3)

2010-12-22 1:35 pm
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Dear [tenant's name],
We are writing to inform you that, following the reduction in the power supply that occurred last summer (as a consequence of late payments), the electricity supply company (Enel) requires a new contract to be signed. This is part of the standard reactivation procedure in such cases. At present, the supply of electricity is provided under a temporary contract. The new contract must, in any case, be signed by us, after which we may consider transferring the contract to your name. This could be done if you would be willing to pay the bills by direct debit or by credit card.
The charges, including a security deposit, are €....
We have also paid the telephone bills since [date], because [tenant's friend] refuses to do so, on the grounds that she is not using the telephone or the internet. We could, if you prefer, terminate the contract (which is presently in our name) with the telephone company (Wind).
Your immediate attention to these matters would be appreciated, as would an early reply.
Sincerely yours,
[landlord].
2010-12-23 7:56 am
sounds very nice and polite...i don't think u have to change anything...
2010-12-22 7:49 pm
Dear Landlord,

Please explain my enquiries as follows:

1) What does late payment got to do with reduction of power and renewing of contract? Everybody pays late. I just happened to be one of them.

2) Temporary contract? Pls elaborated, I'm willing to pay bills directly without having to trouble you.

3) As for the telephone bills charges that you're paying now, please re-affirmed with me again if I want telephone & internet services as provide. I'm contemplating what are the charges like if I choose only to use the internet without the phone and or maybe both. Could you help to provide more details on this matter?

Your prompt attention is greatly appreciated.
New Tenant

*Sorry for all the inconvience caused. I'm new around town.


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