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Today, I had a school picnic with my class. We went to a small hotel. First, we took a photo of the whole class. Next, we played in a very different playground. There was no see-saw or slide but some big cars, shooting games, chess and ball games. I played shooting games with my friends. They were Ken, Ben, Mark and Jack. It was exciting. Then, we had lunch. After a moment, we played football. At last, we went back to school by school bus.
I hope I can have a school picnic again soon.


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Today, I went on a school picnic with my classmates. We went to a small hotel. First, we took a photo for whole class. Next, we played in a strange playground. There were no see-saws, slides...... but there were some big cars, shooting games, chess boards and ball games. I played shooting games with my friends. They are Ken, Ben, Mark and Jack. It was exciting. Then, we had lunch. After that, we played football. At last, we went back to school by school bus.
I hope I can have another school picnic soon.

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