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Good afternoon everyone. My name is Peter. I am the marketing manager of a film company.I want to ask you a question. Have you ever read a novel called The Old Man and The Sea?If no, it doesn't matter. Today, I'm going to talk about a film that is also called The Old Man and The Sea .I'll tell you my opinion of the plot and the leading actor.But first, let me tell you some information about this film. This film was directed by John Sturges. The plot was rewritten from the novel of the same name. It is an inspiring film.This film takes place in the Caribbean Sea in Cuba .The main character of this film is an old fisherman,Santiago.He is a strong man but he is unlucky. He has gone to the sea 84 days without catching any fish at all, but he has a wish. He wants to catch a huge fish as when he was young.On the eighty-fifth day, a huge fish takes his bait. Santiago and the fish pull against each other for two days and two nights.Could he catch the fish finally? I recommend you to watch it youself. You will know what the ending happens.





Explanation:
(1) 'everyone' is one word, not every one.(2) Book title should be capitalized.(3) Answer form should be in 'yes' or 'no'.

(4) 'matter' is used as a verb here, not a noun.

(5) Use 'that is' instead of a comma to prevent confusion.

(6) Again, film titles should be capitalized.

(7) Spelling mistake. 'Theplot' should be 'The plot'.

(8) Wrong tense. The past pariciple of 'rewrite' should be 'rewritten'.

(9) Wrong article.

(10) The plot of the film should be in present tense (as follows).

(11) Missing 'the'.

(12) Too wordy. Just say the name of the person.

(13) Missing preposition.

(14) Missing preposition. It should be clear how long the man and the fish pull against each other.

(15) Spelling mistake.

Good afternoon everyone. My name is Peter, and I am working as a marketing manager in an international company.I want to ask you a question. Have you ever read a novel “the old man and the sea”?If not, it doesn’t really matter. Today, I’m going to talk about a film based on it.I’ll tell you my opinion of the script and the main theme.But first, let me tell you some information about this film. John Sturges directed it, and the script was based on that same novel. It was so inspiring!It was filmed at the Caribbean Sea in Cuba .The story was about an old fisherman named Santiago. .He was a strong man but unfortunate. He had been fishing for 84 days without a catch, but he had a belief. He wanted to catch a big fish as when he was young.On the eighty-fifth day, a big fish took his bait. Santiago struggled with the fish for two days and nights.Can he catch the fish? I want you to witness yourselves, and then you will know what happened.Note:1. Sometimes, it is much desirable to link your introduction with your position, and I suppose you work in an international company?2. There was no mention of the main actor in the whole speech, so I guess you refer to the main theme (ie. The story itself).3. You should use script (劇本) instead of plot (情節).
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Good afternoon every one. My name is Peter. I am the marketing manager of a film company.I want to ask you a question. Have you ever read a novel called The old man and the sea?If not, it doesn’t matter. Today，I’m going to talk about a film which is also called the old man and the sea.I’ll tell you my own opinion about the plot and the leading actor.But firstly, let me tell you some information about this film.This film was directed by John Sturges. The plot was rewrote from the novel of the same name. It is a inspiring film.This film took place in Caribbean Sea in Cuba .The main character of this film is an old fisherman, who is named Santiago .He is a strong man but he is unlucky. He has gone to the sea for 84 days without catching any fish, but he has a wish. He wants to catch a huge fish when he was young.On the eighty-fifth day, a huge fish took his bait.Santiago and the fish pull each other for two days and two nights.In the end, could he catch the fish? I recommend you to watch it youself. Then you will know what happened at the end.

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Good afternoon every one. My name is Peter.I am the marketing manager of a film company.I want to ask you a question. Have you ever read a novel called The old man and the sea?If not, it doesn’t a matter. Today，I’m going to talk about a film , it is also called the old man and the sea.I’ll tell you my opinion of the plot and the leading actor.But first, let me tell you some information about this film. This film was directed by John Sturges. The plot was rewritten from the novel of the same name. It is an inspiring film.This film took place in Caribbean Sea in Cuba .The main character of this film is an old fisherman, who is named Santiago .He is a strong man but he is unlucky. He has gone to the sea 84 days without catching any fish at all, but he has a wish. He wants to catch a huge fish as when he was young.On the eighty-fifth day, a huge fish takes his bait. Santiago and the fish pull each other for two days and two nights.Could he catch the fish finally? I recommend you to watch it yourself. You will know what the ending happens.

2010-11-24 12:56:10 補充：
it doesn’t a matter. > it doesn't matter.

Good afternoon . My name is Peter.I am a marketing manager of a film company.

I want to ask you a question. Have you ever read a novel called The old man and the sea?

lf not, it doesn’t matter. Today，I’m going to talk about a film called the old man and the sea.