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Tam

2010-11-17 9:39 pm

This essay has not be reviewed. The time is not enough today. Some of my problems is that I do not know how to construct the sentences. I seldom write this kind of contect.
Now I am trying to read the essay which a well-wisher assist me to correct every day. I hope I can improve English in this medthod.

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Do you have the hobby of collecting stamp? I don't know about you but I do. Sometimes I receive letters from Macau, mainland or foreign and I like to collect the stamps in my stamp albums.

Collecting stamp is a good hobby for us. We can improve our knowledge, learn more culture of countries. There are some pretty patterns which included nature knowledge, social culture in stamps. Admiring stamps can let us learn more knowledge, enrich ourselves.

We can enjoy from collecting stamp. The patterns in stamps are art. It show the social culture. Each small stamp have each different kind of art. When we admire stamps, we can enhance our artistic taste.

Stamp collecting can make collectors togther. It is a open activity, so it can connect difference kind of people. Exhibitions and communication meetings also become good performs to communication. They assist us to enhance friendship.

Of course, there are only a little part of benefits. Stamp collecting is really a good habit. Try to collect stamp and to be your habit, and you will discover your taste improving.

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集蓠能增加知识、开阔眼界。蓠票中蕴含覑丰富的科谏文化知识，包括自然科谏、社缚科谏各谏科的知识。欣赏、研究蓠票，集蓠者可以丰富自己的知识，充讳自己的内心世界。

集蓠给人以美的享受和精神愉悦。蓠票的玏面是以生舱的迟术形象支反映社缚生活，每一枚蓠票都是一件小形迟术品。集蓠者在欣赏蓠票时可以领略独特的迟术情趣，感受方寸天地展现的迟术咙鲗，并可以提高迟术鉴赏能力。

集蓠是一项开放性的社缚文化活舱。集蓠埄系了社缚各苮阶层，成为人们之寗增加交往、增进友谊的纽带。僐嫏性蓠展成为世界各僐文化交流的使者，拓展了僐嫏文化交流的渠道，有助于各僐人民之寗相互了解，增加彼此的友谊。

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非天使

2010-11-18 11:52 pm

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This essay has not be been reviewed yet. The time of mine is not enough today, Some of my problems is that I do not know how to construct the sentences. I seldom write this kind of context.
Now I am trying to read the essay which a well-wisher assists me to correct every day. I hope I can improve English in this method.

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Do you have the hobby of collecting stamps? I don't know how about you but I do. Sometimes, I received letters from Macau, mainland or foreign countries and I like to collect the stamps in from those letters to my stamp albums.

Collecting stamp is a good hobby for us. We can improve increase (improve 應也是正確，只是下段之enhance our artistic tastes, 我認為將enhance 改為improve，比較合適，因enhance 意較傾向於”強化”即在原有的能力再強化，而improve 則較有”提升””改善”的意思，強化是原有的東西再加強了，改善後則未必與原有的東西相同) our knowledge, learn more cultures of countries for there are some pretty patterns, which included Nature (指”大自然”多大寫)knowledge, social cultures, in on stamps, Admiring appreciating stamps those patterns (前面既談及”圖案”，此處直接說欣賞圖案可增加知識，較直接，讀者馬上可了解)can let us learn more knowledge, enrich ourselves our minds (集郵難以致富，可豐富的，應是心智).

We can enjoy the interest from of collecting stamp. The patterns in on stamps are arts. It they show the social cultures, each small stamp has each different kind of special art of its own. When we admire Appreciating stamps, we can enhance improve our artistic tastes.

Stamp collecting can makes collectors get together. It is an open activity, so it can connect different kind of people, such as exhibitions and communication meetings also become good performs platforms to for communication. They assist us to enhance friendships.

Of course, there are only a few little part of (little 用於不可數名詞)benefits, but (前面既說只有一些利益，而此處又說是個好習慣，在兩個不同意境（如正與負面、好與壞，或不同相關的兩件事間）應有一轉折字，故加上but）stamp collecting is really a good habit, try to collect stamp do it and to make it be your habit, and you will discover find (discover 較屬於探索式的發現，一般事物用find，比較合宜)your taste has been improved.

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