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What is your favourite hobby? If you don’t have any hobbies, your life will not be content .When I was ten years ’old , my grandmother told me about the importance of hobby, she always said that the hobby could improve our daily life. Nowadays, I am the student of Queen Maud Secondary School but I still remember hers.
However, when I come back to home , my grandmother’s breath have disappeared in the air. Although my grandmother haven't needed anything that she wanted, i think she would have liked our family can be more harmony and solidarity. And the important thing that affect our life is the hobby.
After that , i hope i can have a hobby so i engage in the reading club, and bring up a good character to help by myself.
So when someone says 'hi' to me , i will answer him immediately.
This shows hobby is a key which can improve our life and makes us be the polite person.
英文作文 關於hobby
2010-10-29 1:07 am
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2010-10-29 3:11 am
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CORRECTION~~好有問題= =
What is your favourite hobby? If you don’t have any hobbies, your life will not be content .When I was ten years ’old , my grandmother told me about the importance of hobby, she always said that the hobby could 1. broanden our horizon and enrich our studying school life . 2. Because of her words and encouragements I am the student of Queen Maud Secondary School, which is a popular and tremendous institute in Hong Kong nowadays.
However, when I 3 .ca me back to home , my grandmother’s breath have disappeared in the air. 4. Although the willing of my grandma have not been statisfied , i think she would 5. liked our family can be more harmony and solidarity. 6. And the most important thing that she bequeathed to me was the words of emphasizing the importances of the hobbies. It always rings my bell.
From then on, i hope i can have a hobby so i engage in the reading club, 7. which further improves my self-management. It is extremely beneficial to my school life.
This shows hobby is a key which can improve our life and makes us be 8. a polite person.
daily life cannot be improved= = 只會the quality of daily life can be improved 所以就改左做上面咁 我知你係想講因為你GRANDMA講過HOBBY好緊要 同埋係可以令到你IMPROVE YOUR DAILY LIFE. 而就係因為咁你先入到一間好中學. 我覺得如果你唔DESCRIBE下間學校會點 出面D人唔會知道你間學校係好定差. grammatical mistake 你GRANDMA 死左係之前的事 咩係Although my grandmother haven't needed anything that she wanted= = 完全唔知你講咩 無左WOULD好似好D 我知你係想講話你GRANDMA 最影響到你的係叫你參加HOBBIES 不過你咁樣寫唔係好順 咩係bring up a good character to help by myself. 你係唔係想講自我管理>? 係SELF-MANAGEMENT 同埋你之後講的野都同SELF-MANAGEMENT無關係 problems of article
by WInG~~~
2010-10-28 19:13:56 補充：
SORRY 上面唔應該係POINT FORM 應該係須住1234567咁去
2010-10-29 1:17 am
ok ok very good
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