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2010-09-16 7:16 am
有D唔識作,可以的幫我加上去!!THX



我們坐昂坪360纜車由東涌去大嶼山昂平。我們可以看到看大嶼山郊野公園,香港國際機場,天壇大佛及自然之美和整個大嶼山島。
在昂平車站,我們行路到昂平市場。我們可以參觀商店,餐館和其他旅遊景點和購買一些紀念品。
從昂平市場到天壇大佛要 5分鐘步行路程。爬260步樓梯到達天壇大佛。用銅製造和室外座位,天壇大佛是世界同類型的最大。其巨大的規模僅會令你驚嘆。我們在午餐素食廚房寶蓮寺吃一些美味的素菜。



The NP360 cable car runs from the town of Tung Chung on the Lantau Island to Ngong Ping in the hills. we can get a good view of the hills of the Lantau Island Country Park, Hong Kong International Airport, the Giant Buddha and the natural beauty of the entire Lantau Island.
Ngong Ping Station , we are take a walk to Ngong Ping Market . We can Visit shops, restaurants, and other tourist attractions buy to souvenirs . The famous Giant Buddha is just 5 minutes' walk away.
Climb the 260-step staircase to reach the Giant Buddha. Made with bronze and outdoor-seating, it is the biggest of its kind in the world. Its enormous size alone will make you marvel. We lunch at Vegetarian Kitchen in Po Lin Monastery eat some vegetable foods .




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2010-09-16 11:22 pm
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The NP360 cable car runs from the town of Tung Chung on the Lantau Island to Ngong Ping in the hills. we can get a good view of the hills of the Lantau Island Country Park, Hong Kong International Airport, the Giant Buddha and the natural beauty of the entire Lantau Island.
Ngong Ping Station , we can take a walk to Ngong Ping Market . We can visit shops, restaurants, and other tourist attractions to buy souvenirs .
Next attraction, the famous Giant Buddha is just a 5-minute walk away.
We can climb the 260-step staircase to reach the Giant Buddha. Made with bronze and being an outdoor-seating statue, it is the biggest of its kind in the world. Its enormous size alone will make you marvel. We can have lunch at Vegetarian Kitchen in Po Lin Monastery to eat some Chinese vegetarian foods.

故事很全面,有層次,帶讀者跟住遊覽,只是有些深一點的complex sentence結構要留意漏了些重要的詞。最一句要重覆vegetarian並不太好,其實Vegetrian Kitchen是否必要?
全篇用了can verb來寫,是旅遊書介紹的寫法,並不旅遊報告。如果題目的旅遊報告的話,請把can verb等tense全轉為verb的past tense.
2010-09-17 1:49 am
Wing Hong:
The NP 360 cable car runs from Tung Chung on Lantau Island Island to
Ngong Ping among the hills. Along the trip, we can get a good panoramic
view of all hills of the Lantau Island Country Park, Hong Kong International
Airport, the bronze Big Buddha and most of the natural and tranquil beauties of the entire Lantau Island. From Ngong Ping Station, we take a walk to Ngong Ping Market where
there are many shops , restaurants and souvenir stalls that attract most
tourists. If we want to take a close look at the Big Buddha, it is just five
minutes' walk away.
A cement staircase of 260 steps leads straight to the giant bronze Buddha. It's enormous size alone will make you mervel as it is the biggest outdoor statue of sitting Buddha in the world. To end our tour, we have a delicious
vegetarian lunch in Vegetarian Kitchen at Po Lin Monastery.
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