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It was the first week of my study at Sha Tin Government School. On September 2nd, we had an orientation day for the Form 1 students. Some Form 4 students led us around the floors and introduced the special rooms. After that we played some games in the hall.

I thought the game ‘Stepping on the newspaper’ was the best game I had ever played. Students were divided into twenty groups. Each group was asked to divide a newspaper into nine grids and assign each grid a number. Then the host called out a number, and the corresponding part of the newspaper had to be removed. After that each group must try to fit all members onto the now smaller newspaper. When that was done the host called out the next number. The last group remained standing on the newspaper win.

We had a house meeting on the following day. The house leader shared his experience, encouraged the good students of the B house, and gave out some prizes.

I also joined a boy scouts club because I like camping and hiking. The first week of S.T.G.S.S. was great!

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This is the first week I study in Sha Tin Government School. On the 2nd September, we had a Form 1 welcome day activity. Some Form 4 students leaded us to each floors and introduced the special rooms. After that we played some game in the hall. I thought the game ‘Step on the newspaper’ was the best game I had ever played. All the students had divided into twenty groups. Each groups needed to divide a page of newspaper into nine grids. Then the host called out the number of the grid you needed to cut out. The last group of all people couldn’t stand on the newspaper won.
Next day, we had a house meeting.It was about the house leader exchanging and encouragement of the good students of B house by some prizes.
I also joined a boy scouts club because I like going to camp and hiking. The first week of S.T.G.S.S. was great!
Incorrect:
1 Some Form 4 students leaded us to each floors and introduced the special rooms.(改:each floors ----each floor)
2 After that we played some game in the hall(改:some game ----some games)
3 Each groups needed to divide a page of newspaper into nine grids.(改:Each groups ----Each group)
4 I also joined a boy scouts club because I like going to camp and hiking. The first week of S.T.G.S.S. was great!(改:going to camp and hiking------going to camps and hiking)