summer holiday 唔該幫我睇吓有沒有錯

mcdull_baby：
I have done many things in this summer holidays(暑假,聖誕,新年假等有 s 的), I played NDS(你最好寫全個名稱)games, watched television and did my
summer holidays homework at home.
I also went to watch a film called ' The Toy Story III ' with my friends ; it was
a film of a funny story.
I went camping to Po Leung Kuk Jocky Club Tai Tong Holiday Camp with
my family for three days. There I went cycling, singing, playing games and
indoor rock climbing.
I really enjoy my summer holidays.

I did many things in summer holidays. I played NDS games,watched TV, did my summer holiday homework at home.
I also went to cinema to watch a film called "The Toy Story III" with my friends. It was a funny story film.
I went to a camp for three days in Po Leung Kuk Jockey Club Tai Tong Holiday Camp with my family. I rode bicycle, sang songs , played games and enjoyed indoor rock climbing.
I really enjoyed my summer holidays.

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summer holiday(s)好似mo s......
i really enjoy(ed) my summer holiday(s)個enjoy(ed)好似5加ed(因為你宜家仲enjoy緊,5係only當時enjoy)