please edit this for 10 points?

noel_xo

2010-07-25 8:03 pm

please correct any grammatical mistakes, make the paragraph stronger, and reword some sentences.

Eric Clapton's depiction of the interaction between a man and woman before, during and after going out for the evening is powerful in its intimacy and also in the praise, admiration and love expressed. The intense guitar solo in the beginning of the piece, followed by the slow music with the romantic lyrics reflect how the deeply in love couples feel about each other in now a day.

Eric Clapton's depiction of the interaction between a man and woman before, during and after going out for the evening is powerful in its intimacy and also in the praise, admiration and love expressed. The intense guitar solo in the beginning of the piece, followed by the slow music with the romantic lyrics reflect how the deeply in love couples feel about each other in now a day.

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2010-07-29 1:46 pm

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Eric Clapton's depiction of the interaction between a man and woman before, during and after going out for the evening is powerful in its intimacy and in the praise, admiration and love expressed. The intense guitar solo in the beginning of the piece, followed by the slow music with the romantic lyrics, reflect how the deeply in love couples feel about each other in now a day.

--I took out "also" and added a comma after"romantic lyrics" and I don't know what you mean by "in now a day" so I left that alone - you may want to reqord that part since it doesn't make sense the way it is written now (I'm not sure what you meant so I can't offer any suggestions on that).

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