請幫忙修改文法(我知有錯, 但唔知點算好) 謝謝~

1) I want this job because I love HK and I hope to be able to show our culture and sightseeing spots to tourists. For example, I will take them to the Peak to view the night scenery of Victoria Harbour. In addition, I will take them to try our local delicacies, such as wonton noodle soup, ha gau, siu mai, and cha siu bau, etc. 2) I am 18 years old, graduated Form 5 from Ho Dao College. Being a Leader in the Girl Guide during my secondary school years, I have developed good leadership skills . Besides, I make a lot of friends through conservations. Most of my friends think that I am very friendly. 3) I am familiar with the culture and tourist routes of HK. 4) When will I expect to hear from you?

1) I apply for this job because I love HK and I hope to introduce the local culture and scenic spots to tourists. To do so, I will bring them to The Peak to view the beautiful
night scenery of the HK Victorira Harbour. I will also take them to enjoy the local
delicious food, such as wonton noodle, ha gau, siu mai and cha siu bau etc.

2) I am 18 years old and is a Form 5 graduate of Ho Dao College. I possess good
leadership skills as I was the leader of girl guides in secondary school. Besides, I
am also good at communication and enjoy getting along with people. Therefore, I
have made a lot of friends. Most of my friends consider that I am a very friendly
person.

3) I have a deep understanding of the local culture and tourism of HK.

4) When will I be notified of the results?


Just a few suggestions:

1. The examples only include tourist spots but no culture aspects. you may also mention some historical spots for tourists in HK.
2. talkative may give negative impression to people as it seems you talk all day without stopping.

3. No examples are given.

Hope you get the job!