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I am totally agreeing that 我會用 i totally agree with that/this.
There are many reasons to support my point of views.--> DELETE many
In my mind,我會用, To me, (對我來說)
is not easy task --> is not an easy task
many people want to be a fashionable person-->many people want to be fashionable
become a fashionable person-->become fashionable
can’t success-->succeed
two key point --> two key points or change to two main reasons(theme都得)


are also a fashionable person--> are also fashionable
For example when-> For example, when
watch the TV programme-->watch the TV programmeS
we can find many --> find out
actors, who are --> actors who are 你的重點是WHO ARE之後，如果WHO ARE後面的只是附加的，就加 ,
They are a big eyes, high nose and smile face etc.--> They have big eyes, high noses and smile faces
they have a many beautiful cloths--> they wear beautiful clothes.
dress--> dresses


2010-04-14 19:39:35 補充：
are a beautiful --> are beautiful
every one agree --> agrees
they are a beautiful boys or girls, who is also a fashionable person.--> they are beautiful, (then) they are fashionable. (有前面發生，後就會發生的MEANING)
color hair--> colored hair (adj + ed)

2010-04-14 19:39:56 補充：
many pop stars who have--> delete who
so young people follow them.--> so young people follow.
popular--> more popular

in my society--> in this society (society belongs to all people live there)
No one be willing to see--> No one is willing to see

2010-04-14 19:40:20 補充：
Every one will even agree ugly people ''should'' not be fashionable請問是不應該還是不懂FASHION?
My friend, Tom, --> Tom, my friend, 這用, 用對了，不過主次調亂了
a shoe--> shoes/ a pair of shoes
I asked him that why you buy a shoe?-->用覆述 --> why he brought that shoes.
He tell me--> told

2010-04-14 19:40:34 補充：
he find--> found a famous basketball star who had --> +that shoes and look--> looked very smart.
He want to get a shoe like it. So he have bought it. --> He wanted to get a pair of shoes like that. So he brought it.

2010-04-14 19:41:50 補充：
I agree this statement ‘to be fashionable is to be beautiful and popular.' --> delete 'this statement''

--> although some disagree this statement, there are only a minority.

太多錯字了 你的spelling和grammar都錯了 應該是：
Question
‘to be fashionable is to be beautiful and popular.’ Do you agree or disagree?

Answer

to be fashionable must be beautiful and popular, I am totally agreeing that. There are many reasons to support my point of views.

In my mind, to be fashionable is not easy task, many people want to be a fashionable person, but there only are a few people can become a fashionable person. Why they can’t success? How to be a fashionable person? There are two key point – beautiful and popular.

I think many beautiful people are also a fashionable person. For example when we watch the TV programmed, we can find many actress and actors, who are very beautiful. They are a big eyes, high nose and smile face etc. also they have a many beautiful cloths, t-shirts and dress. So we think that they are a fashionable person.

Some one thinks that most fashionable things are a beautiful and excellent. People will like it. I do believe that every one agree they are a beautiful boys or girls, who is also a fashionable person. For example, there are many young people trying to make a color hair, as they find many pop stars that have made a color hair. Young people think the pop stars look smart and beautiful, so young people follow them.

It is a fashion trend and popular in my society. No one be willing to see ugly people. Every one will even agree ugly people should not be fashionable. My friend, Tom, bought a beautiful shoe. I asked him that why you buy a shoe? He tells me that he find a famous basketball star who has shoe and look very smart. He wants to get a shoe like it. So he has bought it. It is a good example ‘to be fashionable is to be beautiful and popular.

To conclude, I agree this statement ‘to be fashionable is to be beautiful and popular.’ Although some people disagrees this statement, I think there are only a few people disagreeing this statement.

2010-04-14 19:14:01 補充：
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