Eng.Grammar Checking

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Heritage conservation of Wing Lee Street and Ladder Street in Central has become a hot issue recently. I admire residents of these two streets, who have lived there for many years, and activists who support these residents as they are brave enough to try their best preserving antique buildings and streets there. Nevertheless, I consider that redevelopment of these streets may not be entirely wrong as it has both advantages and disadvantages.

Redevelopment of the Wing Lee Street and Ladder Street by the government can help to improve the living conditions of residents there. Most buildings in these two streets are already in very poor conditions. Renovation of the Wing Lee Street by the government can avoid accidents that may endanger the life of pedestrians and residents. The residents can also make use of the government’s compensation to buy a better house. Moreover, redevelopment of these streets will provide space for the construction of escalators that can relieve the traffic congestion, provide convenience to the elderly, save traveling time of residents in Central and benefit the tourism.

On the other hand, too many redevelopments in Central may create problems. For example, it will distort the appearance of the redevelopment area that will in turn reduce its historical value. Besides, Central is home to many people that have been living there for generations. These residents have strong sentiments towards their homes, neighbours (or neighbourhood) and streets. It is therefore a shame to destruct these streets that symbolize the history of Central for the past centuries.
In conclusion, the government should preserve the old districts and streets in Central as they are places full of sentiments and buildings of architectural significance. The government should think of a better alternative other than redevelopment as conservation of these old streets is not just an act of heritage conservation ... (Continue in opinion session)

2010-04-08 18:54:28 補充：
The small businesses and shops in these streets also represent part of our traditional cultures, which are tourist attractions that help to boost our tourism. If the government can cooperate with the heritage activists and residents, we can have a win-win solution.

(Note : I put the ending here.)

2010-04-08 18:55:32 補充：
See my comments on your original passage.

... Central where they lived (present perfect tense should be used as they are still living there) for many years. ....

2010-04-08 18:56:03 補充：
See my other comments.

... on Wing Lee Street (are you talking this street or both street?),the government renovates the Wing Lee Street can protect the safety (the safety does not require your protection) of passer-by and residents...

2010-04-08 18:56:59 補充：
I need to re-write your essay as the organization is not logical apart from the grammatic errors.

Hope that this will be helpful to you.