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Peter is the winner of the 5th Outstanding Prefect. He is a very good prefect/discipline because he always helps others . For example, whenever he sees some teachers who have a lot of books in hand, he will immediately give them a hand with the books.
When he was young, he, being a well-educated person, often helped his folks too. Therefore, his folks' attitude towards him is also very good and respect him well.
Peter wouldn't wish to have any rewards from those whom he had ever helped with heart and soul( 全心全意 ). He always says : A good man/A kindly man will be rewarded ! He wishes those who always help others would feel very happy no matter how they will be rewarded nothing.

應改成:
Peter is the winner of the 5th Outstanding Prefect .Peter was very good at discipline,and he always help others.Example:He saw a teacher is taking a lot of books,so he went to help the teacher immediately.
When he was young,he always help his folks too because Peter has well educated,so his folks was very well too.
Peter help others was not want to took return,he has a wholehearted to help other,he always say:[A good man rewarded!]he want all people can always help people,and they would be happy!