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My name is May. I am a F.2 student. I like music, fashion and design. About one year ago I learned guitar. Therefore, I can play the guitar . I have a younger brother. He loves music too and has been learning piano till now. My favourite fashion designer is Lee Alexander McQueen . Once I see his fashion design, I never forget it .
RealIy, I am longing to join this tour exchange because it is a good chance for me to improve my skill of speaking English. As I seldom speak English in Hong Kong, I have no confidence in using English to communicate with foreigners .I am sure that I will take this valuable opportunity to upgrade my self-confidence and to make new friends in the USA.

My name is May. I am a F2 student. I like music, fashion and design. I like playing guitar and learnt about a year ago. I have a younger brother who is learning piano. We both love music. My favourite fashion designer is Lee Alexander McQueen. Ocen I saw his design, I never forgot.

I really do love to join this exchange tour. In Hong Kong, as you know, I don't have many chances to speak English. I feel shy and lack of confidence when I talk to foreigners. To join this exchange tour, for sure, will be a great opportunity for me to build up me self confidence of speaking English and make some new friends in the state as well.

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My name is May. I am F.2. I like music,fashion and design. I can play the guitar as I started learning it a year ago. I have a younger brother who plays the piano. We both love music.

My favourite fashion designer is Lee Alexander McQueen. I could not forget his designs after I saw them. What an amazing designer he is.

I hope I could take part of this exchange student programs, because this is a hugh opportunity for me. I seldom speak English in Hong Kong but also because of the lack of confidence. I want to get a chance to increase my confidence. Also, I would like to make some new friends in America. I expect I can talk to a foreigner fluently after this trip.