edit this for 10 points please?

2010-02-28 6:20 pm
Other than the Grade 10 orchestra, ____and _____ did an excellent performance in the first half of the Chamber Night. They chose the song “Spring” which is composed by L.V. Beethoven. ____’s great violin skills accompanied by _____'s outstanding piano skills immediately created a tremendous melody when they started. ___ also did détaché in some parts of the piece which gave audiences an imagination of bunnies hopping around in spring. Overall, they created a happy and lively mood to match the feeling of spring.

After the last performance, every audience cheered with a big smile on their faces. The emcee, ____________, announced that Chamber Night had ended and asked the audiences to return home safely. While everyone was ready to go home, the tech crew suddenly announced that the Canadian woman hockey team won the gold medal in the Winter Olympic. After hearing this announcement, everyone jumped for joy and evacuated the building with a splendid memory.

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2010-02-28 6:37 pm
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Other than the Grade 10 orchestra, ____and _____ performed during the first half of the Chamber night, an excellent ensemble of "Spring", by L. V. Beethoven. The musical talent of ______ , playing the violin, resounded beautifully along with the outstanding skill piano playing of _________. Also included in the piece was a detache, using hopping rabbits as a background for spring. Delightful and lively, it gave an appreciative good feeling to the audience in the binds of a cold winter.


The audience cheered with approval during the end of the music _______. The emcee ____________, announced that Chamber Night had ended and asked the audiences to return home safely. While people began to get ready to leave, the tech crew announced that the Canadian woman hockey team had won the gold medal in the Winter Olympics, much to the joy of the audience, who left the building with smiles on their faces and a good feeling in their hearts.
2010-03-01 2:24 am
How about 'the performed the song...' instead of 'they chose the song'. and when you say 'evacuated' the building it kinda sends me the message that there was some disaster and they needed to get out.


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