Help me我的英文文法等有冇錯thx

你的英文外國人就看得一頭霧水，不過就番你的英文程度用最簡單的方法給你改正，你自己記住啲用字跟你用中文思想的關聯希望下次用得正確啦。

1.fast food makes (使到/令) many americans fat and get all kinds (種類) of sickness (疾病) [sick是「病了」]

2.americans eat fast food often

3.many americans have an obesity problem (假如你淨識一個fat字，咁就要改成句：many Americans have the problem of being fat.

4.i think the documentary tries to tell us fast food is bad for the/our health, it makes people addicted and get sick when eatten too much.so we should reduce eating fast food.

5.i think the presenter is stupid because he did dangerous experiment. the presenter clearly knows that eating too much fast food will make his organs hurt seriously.[ ]you've already think he is stupid at the beginning, no need to repeat!

6.i think schools can ask the school tuck-shop sell some healthy food,like fruit juice, juice can promote healthy diet. families can feed their children many fruits everyday.
[I don't know what a tuck-shop is, so leave it to you.]

7.after 30 days, morgan got fat liver, high cholesterol,18%body fat, and he felt depressed and exhausted and so on.
[Note two verbs in your original sentence! (get and feel)]
[Use past tense becuase you're commenting a report of a event already happened.]

Actually the content is not bad and has many good ideas. Study the sentence structure and subject-verb-object writing more and study more volcab so that you may have more words to use in describing things.

1. Having fast food makes many Americans become fatter and get all manner of sick.

2.The americans usually eat fast food.

3.Many americans are fat problematically.

4.I think the documentary tries to tell us fast food is bad for health,it makes people become fatter,addiction and get sick when you eat too much.So we should reduce to eat fast food.

5.I think the presenter is stupid because he experimented dangerous.He cleared to know that eat too much fast food will make body orgas hurt serious.So he is very stupid.

6.I think schools can ask school tuck-shop to sell some health food,like fruit juice.It promotes healthy eating.Families can buy some fruit for their child.

7.After 30 days, the liver of morgan will get fatter,cholesterol will raise 18% the fat of body. It feels depressed and exhausted and so on.

我Ｄ英文都係好差。
我幫你做番譯
１。速食受到很多美國人發並獲取所有方式的病人
２。americans 通常吃速食【你串錯字】
３。很多美國人有肥胖問題
４。我想告訴我們的快速食物對身體不好，它使人，到目前為止，成癮，生病的紀錄片嘗試時吃太 much.so 我們應減少吃速食。
５。我認為，主辦機構是他做的 stupid.because 危險 experiment.the 目前向清楚知道，吃太多的速食會使身體 orgas serious.so，他是很愚蠢的傷害。
６。.i 認為學校可以要求學校 tuck-shop 出售一些保健品像果汁，促進健康 eating.families 汁可以買到水果的孩子。
７。30 天后, 摩根肝臟脂肪、 膽固醇提高、 18%身體脂肪，感到沮喪和疲憊，等等。