Check english please! thanks

Your title has a very serious and fundamental problem. IBM is an IT giant but not a financial institute, how can you expect that it will have problems in the investment market? Does you mean that IBM will restructure itself from an IT company to an investment bank (i.e. you have an insider information)?

Besides, no one knows the future. IBM may face problems and opportunities in future. Your title has only focussed on the potential problems (if any) that IBM may face in next 10 years and is considered to narrow.

I suggest the title be amended as follows:

Challenges of IBM in next decade.


The advantages of the title are as follows:

It has an eye-catching effect on audiences.
You can have the chance to analyse IBM from different perspectives. It is the secret of scoring higher marks.

Hopt that the above can assist you.

我認為這句用作 title 沒甚麼問題。反而 "IBM's next decade investment market challenge" 這句連續用了四個名詞 (decade、investment、market、challenge) 作不同用途，實在太 clumsy！

What will IBM face in the investment market in the next decade?

A little long, but clear and with expectation.

Perhaps a shorter version may be better:

IBM's next decade investment market challenge.

如果以問題來做title 好似唔係咁好
建議左個比你，唔知好唔好

Problems that IBM will face in investment market next decade