請高手100字 中5英文作文改錯.比一垃圾網止 一定會投訴

chan.on23 您好 ~~~

恕我直言說一句，我在最初已經看不明您在寫什麼了……

以下都只是我的一些建議，如有錯誤，請多多指教 ~~~

One day i thing by the bus want to saw a move film at cinema

以上的那一句，您想說什麼？？

是不是「有一天，我想去看在戲院看電影，於是我等巴士」？

應該是這樣說的︰

One day, I wanted to go to watch a movie at the cinema so I waited for a bus.

not long time i get on the bus and i quickly found the sitting

以上那一句是「不久之後，我上了巴士，很快找到了座位」嗎？
Soon, I got on a bus and I found a seat quickly.

but i sitting but long time one old woman getting on the bus i saw her is not easy for getting on the bus

您想說︰「但是坐了一段時間後，看見了一個老婆婆上了車，但那老婆婆找不到座位」嗎？

I was travelling on the bus for quite a long time when I saw an old woman got on the bus. The old woman seemed to be quite difficult to find a seat.

so i stood up give her sitting the old woman sitting and happly and say “Thing you very much you is very nice people”

à所以我就讓座給那老婆婆，之後老婆婆向您道謝說︰「很多謝您！您是一個好人」？？

So I stood up and gave her my seat. The old woman sat down and said, “Thank you very much. You are really a nice person.”

the bus stopped the cinema station i get off the bus and want to the cinema saw the nice film after want to home have a dinner

à巴士就在戲院站停下來，之後我就下了車到戲院看了一套很好看的戲，接着便回家吃飯了

When the bus reached the cinema, I got off the bus and went to the cinema to watch a nice movie. After that, I went back home to have a dinner.

with my family and said about today i felt today is so happy.

à和家人吃晚飯，並和他們說今天玩得很開心。

with my family and said, “Today I have a wonderful day!”

一些提點︰其實整篇文章的字詞用得尚算是可以接受的，但卻串錯了不少的字，如︰went à want，think à thing 等等。

還有，您所寫的文章好像是由中文翻做英文似的，即是文法完全錯掉。

例︰the bus stopped the cinema station

本身您想指的意思為「巴士在戲院站停下來」的，但因為您直譯，所以在這裏的意思變為了「巴士將戲院停了下來」。

多練習，多看英文報章，英文寫作自然會有進步的！

希望可以幫到您 ~~~~~

2010-02-21 16:21:38 補充：
Sorry, à 應為一個右箭嘴(→)

chan.on23
On my way to the cinema

One day I went by bus to a cinema to watch a movie. Soon after I got on the bus and found myself a seat, I saw an old woman getting up the bus
with difficulty and was unable to get a seat. I gave up my seat to her. She
thank me happily and said " Thank you very much, you are a very nice
young man." (假如你是女孩子則改寫作young lady ). I got off the bus at the stop nearby the cinema where I watched a nice movie. I returned home
afterwards to have dinner with my family and told them what had happened
and that I had ahappyday.

chan.on23
1)你的文章說你(想)去看電影而說" I think過去式thought " 是直譯(思想)是錯的,因為你是(希望)去,所以應用" I want過去式wanted "才對。
2)一般說乘巴士去地方用"by bus"就可以了,不需要寫" by the bus"
3)" I want to saw " want 的過去式是wanted又to之後的動詞要用現在式,所以
句子應寫做"I wanted to see"才對。但看電影應用"watch"而不用"see"。
4)我估你想說看見該老婦困難地才上了巴士的意思 那說"I saw an old woman
getting up the bus with difficulty"就十分清楚了。
5)回家食飯寫"went home to have dinner"不須要加a 字。 6) 雖然你年齡小,但禮貌上也會被別人稱young man 或young lady的)。


總結我的答案,英文和中文一樣,講一句話是有很多方法的, 要學好英文,除了學校課本外要往書局找些淺易的課外參考書閱讀及要習慣查字典,及多看英文電視台。