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I was standing on a narrow ledge. If I slipped I would fall hundreds of meters into the dark and be smashed pieces against the rocks. I could not move to my left because a stream of red hot molten lava was creeping towards me from the volcano.That meant I had to go to my right, past that cave. There was much light so I could not see very clearly, but there was something very evil about the cave. I moved slowly and was just level with the entrance, when the head of an enormous black snake appeared. Its stony eyes were fixed on me and its tongue flicked towards me. How could I fight it on such a small ledge? I seemed doomed to be crashed in its coils and then swallowed by it, dying slowly and horribly. Just at that moment my mother shook me. It was just an nightmare. But what is my mother saying? 'Wake up. The plane's on fire. We are all going to die!' Black smoke was pouring from the front of the plane. People were screaming. A series of explosions filled the air, and then a huge bang......

2010-02-13 12:41:50 補充：
下面:尊重原著嘛,不應改得這麼厲害, 而且But what my mother saying少了verb to be.

I was standing on a narrow ledge. I would have fallen to hundreds of meters below if I slipped. I would be smashed to pieces. I could not move to my left.

Since a stream of red hot molten lava crept towards me from the volcano, I had to go past that cave which was on my right hand side. There was not too much light over at the cave, yet there was something very evil about the cave. I moved very slowly and was just about to enter, the head of a giant black snake appeared in front of me. Its stony eyes fixed on me and its tongue flicked towards me. How could I fight with it on such a small ledge? It seemed to me that the snake will be crashed in coils and then swallowed me in a horribly manner. My mother shook me right at that moment. It was just a nightmare. But what did my mother say? Wake up!! The planes are on fire. We are going to die. Black smoke was pouring from the front of the plane, and the people were screaming. A series of explosions filled the air, and then a huge bang….

. But what my
mother saying? "Wake up. The planes on fire. We are all going to die!"
Black amoking was pouring from the front of the plane. People screaming. A
series of explosions filled the air, and then a huge bang......

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