翻譯聖誕節爸爸媽媽帶哥哥和我往廣州去,我們住

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My daddy and mommy/My parents took my elder brother and me to Guangzhou during Christmas holiday/at Christmas. We stayed in a hotel. I was very happy .

Mother and Father Christmas with my brother and I to Guangzhou, we live in a hotel, I frried

I was glad that my parents took elder brother and me for a Christmas trip
in Guangzhou resting at hotel.

During Christmas holiday, I took a trip to Guangzhou with my parents and my older brother. We stayed at a hotel (you can add "for __ nights" here) and the trip was very enjoyable.

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