07 UE proof-reading

意見如下：

例句：Anyone goes to see Hollywoodland and expects to see a fresh angle will be very disappointed.

問題中的例句共有3個動詞 (包括“goes”、“expects”及“will be”)，已違返英文語法規則。

若想把句子修正，使用relative clause -“who”是其中一個方法，這種短句能達到修飾所指示事物的目的。

Anyone who goes to see Hollywoodland and expects to see a fresh angle will be very disappointed. (defining – 特指去看“Hollywoodland”並期望它向觀眾展示新的角度的 “anyone”將會感到非常失望。 )

Anyone, who goes to see Hollywoodland and expects to see a fresh angle, will be very disappointed. (non-defining – 綠色部份的短句只提供額外資訊，沒有界定“anyone”的意思。 )

另外，還有其他方法修改句子：

方法一：把句子分拆， 可組成獨立句子。
a) Some people would go to see Hollywoodland and expect to see a fresh angle. These people will be very disappointed.
b) Some people would go to see Hollywoodland and expect to see a fresh angle, but these people will be very disappointed.

方法二：把句子的動詞減為一個。
Anyone going to see Hollywoodland and expecting to see a fresh angle will be very disappointed.

綜上所述，如想修正句子而作最少修改，表達相類意思，加插 “who”為可取之法。