自薦信點寫?中文and英文都要,只改my exampale

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help me 改以下自薦信...thx~
My name isxxx. I am eleven years old . I shall be graduated in July this academic year at Hoi Ping Chamber of Commerce Primary School. My favorite subject is English. I love learning English because it can make me fun.
I am active in extra-curricular activities. I am a member of the school hand-bell team and Chinese painting class. In addition to playing the piano, I enjoy painting because I like art. My favorite painter is Monet. I think his pictures are colourful and fascinating. One of his master pieces is called Camille. The woman in the long green dress was his wife. I like that picture best.
I know that the academic atmosphere of learning in your school is excellent and the students have many chances to work by themselves. Your teachers are patient and kind too. Moreover, there are lots of extra-curricular activities. I believe I will enjoy my study and the activities at your school.
I want to be a student of your school and I will try my best to be an outstanding student. I hope you will give me a chance to achieve my goal.
I will be most appreciated if you accept me to study at your school.
本人陳小玲現就讀旅港開平商會學校六年級，過去數年曾參加不同的課外活動，如小女童軍、籃球等，亦曾代表學校參加小學奧林匹克數學比賽，取得優異成績。此外，本人亦在校內參與多項服務工作，如圖書館服務生、風紀等。
素仰 貴校校風純樸，師資優良，學生品學俱佳。隨函附上個人簡歷乙份，敬請察閱。 如蒙 提拔，定當悉力以赴，不負所期。

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