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Hi.I am xxx.I AM from Hong Kong.I am proficient in economicS and BAFS.My hobby is reading AS I think reading HELPS me SOLVE my problems.I want to go to New Zealand because New Zealand HAS a good learning environment.
I WILL HAVE THE OPPORTUNITY TO learn many new things and broaden my horizons.THE UNIQUE LEARNING ENVIRONMENT IN NEW ZEALAND can HAVE IMPROVEMENTS IN VARIOUS ASPECTS SUCH AS STUDYING AND CREATIVITY.I HOPE TO BECOME MORE PROFICIENT IN ENGLISH BY STUDYING IN AN ENGLISH ENVIRONMENT. Moreover I like New Zealand's natural scenery and the SIMPLE social practiceS.THESE ARE THE REASONS I WISH to go to New Zealand.

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有冇人可以幫我改下篇野



Hi.I am xxx.I come from Hong Kong.I am proficient in economic and BAFS.My hobby is reading.I think reading can help me solve my problems.I want to go to New Zealand because New Zealand has a good learning environment, and I can learn many new things to broaden my horizon.I think New Zealand's unique learning environment can help me in my study and I really hope that my training on various aspects may be improved and has great progress .I hope to study English in an English speaking environment.This can improve my English proficiency . Moreover I like New Zealand's natural scenery and the common social practice is simple.These are the reasons why I want to go to New Zealand. Thank you .