English Question 麻煩評評以下的英文。謝謝

1. It depends on where do you want to publish this and who is your audience.
2. The content is shallow and without any strong fact based data to back up your statements. As a result, it carries no weight. You are simply telling people something they already know or repeating what the industry considers as common knowledge.
3. I recognize some serious grammatical errors, such as keeps should be keep, need should be needs, If should be if, etc.
4. The English writing is at a Form 1 to Form 2 level. If you intend to publish it, it has to be much deeper.
5. I encourage you to study more, much more, both on the subject matter and English. Good luck.

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