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"Debut trading in Hong Kong"
In recent years, there were many mainland state enterprises kicked off its IPO successfully in Hong Kong, which showed Hong Kong market is a lucrative and helpful for IPO.
Nevertheless, we should not be complacent and negligent, and keeps strengthen our edge and its status as a international financial center.
It is because there are many competitors who are also eyeing this market and luring state enterprises.
Finally,If Hong Kong want to keep its advantage as a financial center, it also need to work more actively.
更新1:
my audience is a secondary school teacher
更新2:
yes, u r right, many obvious grammatical mistakes in this article, this is the result of no double check.