本人是一名自修生 , 想報最後一年HKCEE , 請大家幫我

2009-08-29 4:15 am
本人是一名自修生 , 想報最後一年HKCEE , 請大家幫我批改我這文章....看有什麼地方是錯的 ...Thank you

The Hong Kong government is the biggest employer which have more than 5,000 public servants .However , newspapers always report that these government departments are non-professional and ineffective .Recently , news show that etectrial and mechanical failed to enforce satefy regulations and allow contractors to fail to live up their procedures responsibilities .

You may know that , a life suddenly broke cables in Tai Po in April .Why the department do not learn the series problem . I believe that it is just a tip of the iceberg . These public servants should change their working attitude .Besides ,the government should provide more power to ombudsman for monitering other departmant for maintaining good standards and good practices .

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2009-08-29 6:49 am
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Recently , news show that etectrial and mechanical failed to enforce satefy regulations and allow contractors to fail to live up their procedures responsibilities .

etectrial and mechanical 少jor noun?electrical + mechanical 知什麽?是哪個部門?
allowed contractors to fail to live up to their procedural responsibilities.

procedures = noun
responsibilities = noun

a life suddenly broke cables in Tai Po in April . = ?

Why didn't the department learn from the series of problems.
change their working attitudes
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the government should provide more power to ombudsman for monitering other departmant for maintaining good standards and good practices .
ombudsman -> ombudsmen
太多for

the government should provide more power to ombudsmen to monitor other departments, maintaining good standards and practices.

Please inform me if I am incorrect.

Good luck in preparing for the HKCEE~

2009-08-28 23:09:32 補充:
electrical/mechanical 要拿來形容o野
指部門:Electrical and Mechanical Services Department 機電工程處

Recently, THE news show that the Electrical and Mechanical Services Department failed...
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避免太多in(in Tai Po, in April)
You may know(recall,回想) that the cables of a lift was broken a few months ago in Tai Po.
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2009-08-29 4:20 am
[newspapers always report that these government departments are non-professional and ineffective]

The mistake is :"The newspaper"...it should be changed to the editiors


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