我的英文文法不太好需要一位英文能力好的人幫我修改一下我的文法.感激 : D
My father hope me can grow with joyful,peaceful and healthy,and can having many wonderful memory.Hope me having improvements in my studies,better in English,and I can get admission of a good college in the future.Hope me can mature enough to face any problem.
In this special day,I hope my father can accompany me and my younger sister and brother to grow up.Hope he can take care of himself,and stop smoking.
原文:
我爸爸希望我能快樂平安健康的成長,且能擁有許多美好的回憶.
希望我能功課進步,英文變的更好,然後考上好的(我原本想寫"心中理想的")大學.希望我能夠成熟面對任何問題.
在這特別的日子裡,我也希望爸爸能一路健康陪伴我們3姊弟成長(我原本是想寫"度過人生每個重要的階段"不過實在不知怎麼寫)
希望他能照顧自己(我原本是要寫"注意自己的健康"),把煙戒掉.
也希望他能快樂且享受現在幸福的家庭生活.(這句我完全不會寫)
我覺得我裡面太多Hope有什麼可以替換的字嗎?
幫我修改一下我的英文作文的文法,謝謝囉 20點
2009-08-08 12:19 am
回答 (6)
2009-08-08 1:53 am
✔ 最佳答案
My father hopes that I can grow up healthy , safely , happily , and have many wonderful memories . On my schoolwork , he expects
me to improve my grades, speak better English, and get into a nice
university which I want. He also wants me to face problems in a mature way.
On this special day, I hope my dad can just stay with we children,
get through important times in our lives, until we grow up. I also
hope he can take care of himself, quit smoking, and enjoy his family happily.
附上hope & wish用法
hope是期望某人能達成自己所希望的，
wish則是許願、願望，比較像是久遠的未來才會發生的事情。
修掉一些誤用詞、贅詞，看起來比較自然，
因為真的要說，板大寫的一看就知道是台灣人寫的T_T|||
其實最好不要用中文去寫英文文章，會很死。
要用英文的思維去寫，比較適合！
參考: 15趴字典 + 85趴自己
2016-03-19 12:22 pm
My father hopes that I can grow up healthy , safely , happily , and
have many wonderful memories . On my schoolwork , he expects
me to improve my grades, speak better English, and get into a nice
university which I want. He also wants me to face problems in a mature way.
On this special day, I hope my dad can just stay with we children,
get through important times in our lives, until we grow up. I also
hope he can take care of himself, quit smoking, and enjoy his family happily.
have many wonderful memories . On my schoolwork , he expects
me to improve my grades, speak better English, and get into a nice
university which I want. He also wants me to face problems in a mature way.
On this special day, I hope my dad can just stay with we children,
get through important times in our lives, until we grow up. I also
hope he can take care of himself, quit smoking, and enjoy his family happily.
2009-08-08 1:20 am
你好^^
你的文章有些地方需要修改,我盡量用你原本用的字彙來幫你修改:)
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My father hopes me to grow up with joy, peace, and good health, and at the same time, he hopes that I can have many wonderful memories. He expects me to get more improvements in my studies, especially in English to obtain the admission of good/ideal college in the future. Besides, my father wants me to be mature to face any problem.
In this special day, I hope my father can healthily accomany my sister, brother and me at every important step of ours life to grow up. In addition, I hope my father can care for the health of himself and stop smoking. I wish him to be happy and enjoy the well-being in days of the family,
hope我把你改掉一些,讀起來較順
文法應該是沒什麼問題(如果有請指教 謝謝^^)
還有問題就補充一下 我盡力幫你解釋
希望修改過的文章有幫助到你:)
2009-08-07 17:45:53 補充：
你問的問題超好!
我修改文章時也有想到這個問題
所以盡可能避免用到"wish"這個單字
最後一句我主要是想表達"祝福"
如果你不喜歡可以換用hope
是剛剛我想說你不要太多hope,所以就勉強最後用了wish
其實他還是有正面的想法,只是就像你說的hope比較有可能達到，wish比較不可能達到，或是一種祝福。
我也希望這整篇的"希望"是可以達成的而不是一些不易實現的願望囉!
2009-08-07 18:05:57 補充：
sorry! ours 要把s去掉
哈比把你的文章改得非常好
通順文法又正確
看他的吧~
你的文章有些地方需要修改,我盡量用你原本用的字彙來幫你修改:)
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My father hopes me to grow up with joy, peace, and good health, and at the same time, he hopes that I can have many wonderful memories. He expects me to get more improvements in my studies, especially in English to obtain the admission of good/ideal college in the future. Besides, my father wants me to be mature to face any problem.
In this special day, I hope my father can healthily accomany my sister, brother and me at every important step of ours life to grow up. In addition, I hope my father can care for the health of himself and stop smoking. I wish him to be happy and enjoy the well-being in days of the family,
hope我把你改掉一些,讀起來較順
文法應該是沒什麼問題(如果有請指教 謝謝^^)
還有問題就補充一下 我盡力幫你解釋
希望修改過的文章有幫助到你:)
2009-08-07 17:45:53 補充：
你問的問題超好!
我修改文章時也有想到這個問題
所以盡可能避免用到"wish"這個單字
最後一句我主要是想表達"祝福"
如果你不喜歡可以換用hope
是剛剛我想說你不要太多hope,所以就勉強最後用了wish
其實他還是有正面的想法,只是就像你說的hope比較有可能達到，wish比較不可能達到，或是一種祝福。
我也希望這整篇的"希望"是可以達成的而不是一些不易實現的願望囉!
2009-08-07 18:05:57 補充：
sorry! ours 要把s去掉
哈比把你的文章改得非常好
通順文法又正確
看他的吧~
參考: 我自己
2009-08-08 12:37 am
My father hopes I can be happy,peaceful and healthy when I am growing,and have a lots of wonderful memorys.Hopes my homework having improvements in my studies, my English can be better ,and I can get admission of a good college in the future.Hopes I can mature enough to face any problem.
In this special day,I hope my father can accompany me , my younger sister and brother to grow up.Hope he can take care of himself,and stop smoking.
可以wishs用來代替！
我沒辦法百分之百確定！
但我有改掉許多句子
In this special day,I hope my father can accompany me , my younger sister and brother to grow up.Hope he can take care of himself,and stop smoking.
可以wishs用來代替！
我沒辦法百分之百確定！
但我有改掉許多句子
參考: 自己
2009-08-08 12:24 am
你裡面的hope可以換乘wish把一些換乘wish就很棒了!!~!XD
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