幫忙改改我的英文作文!!!

第1段:
首先,, 唔系can save papers and save notes,,系can save a lot of information.
跟住,,I think electronic textbooks are very convenient in the life , because , it is demand of books and papers are lower .呢句改成:
Electronic textbooks are very convenient in our daily lives.
點解要咁改?
1.唔使要I think,,因為呢個其實系廢的
2.because之前之後唔使+ ","
3.because後面個原因根本唔岩,,已經本身唔系事實,,因為demand系好高,,就算系低,,都唔可以解釋到前面,,因為你唔會話:因為demand低,,咁electronic textbooks 咪方便囉,,意思完全唔岩
跟住,, books and papers 改成lots of information
跟住,,electronic textbooks will be good of the environment應該改成:
electronic textbooks will do good to our studies.
唔系be good,,系do good,,冇得解,,要背
同埋唔關environment事完全
第2段:
首先,,呢句we can easy to carry information and we can easy to search additional information online in the electronic textbooks應該改成:
It is easy for us to save and get information at once.For certain,we can search a wide range of information on the Internet as well.

跟住,, students can study in the electronic textbooks , because , electronic textbooks have many information .呢句其實可以完全delete左佢,,因為呢個意思,,上面已經講到爛左
跟住,,For instance 後面唔系+noun,,系跟sentence,,如果你想跟noun,,你就要用like/such as...

基本上你第1段同第2段所講ge野可以話系重複,,只系表達唔同左少少

第3段:
some people consider electronic textbooks is very expensive than a book .呢句錯哂,,你應該改成:
some(可以唔使要people)consider that electronic textbooks are(唔系is)more(唔系very)expensive than books(唔系a book)
跟住,,That is ture. 可以delete左佢,,因為完全冇意思
跟住,,系cheaper,,唔系cheapper
跟住,,系pecuniary,,唔系 pecuniarily,<--因為呢個系adv,,唔系adj

最後一段:
首先,,to sum up 後面最多只可以有1-兩句句子,,你如果想作多d,,
你可以用all in all/eventually/finally/lastly OR 唔用都得.
跟住,,系I agree to use,,唔系I agree the idea of using ...
跟住,,系bring convenience.
跟住,,bring conveniently and lower cost and save papers for us改成:
bring convenience,reduce cost and even save some paper.
跟住,, last , So 改成 therefore,...

最後-----> some paper (U)數唔到,,單數,,冇s--->解釋:紙張
papers---->數到,,重數----->解釋:報紙
不能錯!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

anniechong:
I support the idea of using electronic textbooks in classrooms . First of all , electronic textbooks can save lots of papers/trees. The demand to print out textbooks, handouts, notes will be greatly decreased since textbooks are saved in the format of electronic. It is not heavy and easy to carry. Moreover, papers saving the the aim to protect our environment.
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anniechong:
Secondly, we can do searching very easy in the electronic textbooks. We can search different topics along this "electronic world" and it makes study more easily and pro-actively. What is the most important, students will no longer carry lots of "heavy books" among schools.
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anniechong:
Lastly, the true is that the costs for electronic textbooks is far much cheaper that the "physical books". It would be great solution to pecuniarily burden.
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anniechong:
To sum up, I personally support the idea the idea of using electronic textbooks in classrooms for it save papers, easy to search and save costs. I hope everybody support this idea.
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I support the idea of using electronic textbooks in classrooms. First of all, electronic textbooks reduce usage of paper. For example, books and notes can be saved in electronic textbook as well as tests and exams. Moreover, the handouts and notes can be saved in it. Hence it reduces the usage of paper, so it becomes a benefit to the environment.

Next, we can carry information and research online all in one small device, as it can store up to 1000s book in it and it can also act as a small laptop to do online research, so that we do not have to bring tones of books to school every day.
Last, some people consider that electronic textbook is more expensive than paper a book which is true. But in the long run, electronic textbook is much cheaper than textbooks, since you do not need to buy certain books every year and find space to store them. So electronic textbook can reduce peculiarly burden.

In conclusion, I support the idea of using electronic textbooks in classroom. Because, electronic textbooks can is convenient, lower cost, save papers and no more heavy bag for us. I hope everyone will use a electronic textbook .


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