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2009-07-18 6:16 pm
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Recently, there are many young models appearing in Hong Kong. They can earn a lot of money I a short time. Therefore, many girls want to become a model and try to lose weight. Unfortunately, they use incorrect way and cause serious effect. Follows are some healthy method to lose weight.


First of all, a balanced diet can provide enough nutrition for our life and prevent we absorb more than we need. Some girls eat little food and take medicines to lose weight. This is a stupid method which will make you dead. Not enough nutrition will reduce your immunity and make you sick. Besides, the medicines may have side effect which affect the efficiency of your organs. So, why do you still use this dangerous method? Just follow the balanced diet to absorb necessary substances to sustain life.


Besides, a regular exercise can also help teenagers to lose weight. Your body muscles need extra oxygen and energy when you doing exercise. So the heart beat rate will increase in order to transfer more materials to muscles. After a period of time, the function of heart and lungs will definitely improve. Furthermore, the extra substances in your body will be used during the exercises. Therefore, doing regular exercises can improve your respiratory system and lose weight at the same time. Do exercises from today to maintain your health.
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Last but not least, you should maintain good attitude during the process of losing weight. Using a healthy method to keep fit is a slow process, but you should keep self-confidence.

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Many teenagers cann’t insist on the losing weight, and finally they cann’t meet their target. So, you should lose weight with a balanced diet and regular exercises with self-confidence.

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If you feel difficulty during the process, just give yourself a smile. Smiling can blow the cobwebs away.

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In conclusion, everyone should use a healthy method to lose weight. Just remember these word, perseverance spells success.

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If you can do regular exercises and have a balanced diet continuously, you can reach your wish and become a healthy and beautiful girl.

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2009-07-28 12:41 am
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( )裏面的話己改正後的答案…
They can earn a lot of money I(in) a short time.
Unfortunately, they use incorrect way(ways) and cause serious effect.
Follows are(There are) some healthy method to lose weight (below).
Your body muscles need extra oxygen and energy when you doing(do) exercise(exercises).
Many teenagers cann’t(cannot) insist on the losing weight, and finally they cann’t(cannot) meet their target(targets).
If you feel (any) difficulty during the process, just give yourself a smile. Smiling can blow the cobwebs away.
In conclusion, everyone should use a healthy method to lose weight. Just remember these word(words), perseverance spells success.
因為唔夠位的關係,所以我係上面篇文搵出整句,之後更改,而不把整篇文章 copy 放上來,之後再改,請見諒!
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