the use of ”age ”

the use of ”age ”
Almost one in ten men your age will die before age 65

hi, for the above sentence, I have used "age" twice".

Any problem in term of grammar and usage?

Ans: Almost one in ten men as your age will die before 65.

In fact, no matter how many times that you choose to use AGE to completed your sentence there is nothing about the grammar but you really makes the reader a bit bothersome and not that fluency.

上面講得好。

点都唔明白為何要用your age will die？直譯中文變左セ?

何不簡單用?

you will die....

A man will die....

或如上面那句。

Almost ten percent of men will die before the age of 65 .

I think so, I would have said it like this:

Almost one out of ten men your age will die before the age of 65.

Almost one out of ten will die before 65 years of age. 會較為恰當。


「Almost one in ten men」只是中文「十個裏面有一個」直譯為英文，但文法不對。

It should be
"Almost one in ten men, the age will die before 65 years old"