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A: Hi,Ppeggy what are you looking at?
>>> A: Hi Peggy! What are you looking at?

B: This is my idol,
>>> B: This is my idol.

A: your idol? Hum… she is very handsome /beautiful, but I don’t recognize her. Is she /he Mary
>>> A: Your idol? Hmm... She is very beautiful, but I don't recognize her. Is her name Mary?

B: no, she is Lily
>>> B: No, her name is Lily.

A: Lily, does she come form Hong Kong
>>> A: Is Lily from Hong Kong?

B: no, she/he cones from China
>>> B: No, she is from China.

A: on! I see. She is a Chinese singer
>>> Oh I see! She is a Chinese singer.

B: yes!
>>> B: Yes!

A: which song is her famous?
>>> A: What are some of her famous songs?

B: hum…she /he have many songs, and his/her the most famous song is apple . Have you even listened?
>>> B: Hmm... She has sung many songs. Her most famous one is called "Apple." Have you ever heard it?

A: yes. I have listened. I remembered that 這首歌攞过獎的.
>>> A: Yes, I have. I recall that it had won awards before.

B: do you like it?
>>> B: Do you like it?

A: yes. I like it very much! Does she have any discs? 係只佢有冇出过唱片
>>> A: Yes, I like it very much! Has she ever released any albums?

B: yes. she has had more than three discs, and I also have two her discs
>>> B: Yes, she has released more than three albums, two of which I own.

A: He looks very young. Does she/he married?
>>> A: She looks very young. Is she married?

B: yes
>>> B: Yes.

A:我好以在電影上見过他,他有沒有拍过任何的電影
>>> A: I think I've seen her in movies. Has she been in any?

B: yes/no. he/she 拍过 cats
>>> B: Yes, she was in the movie, Cats.

A:她真厲害. Have She performed any concerts?
>>> A: She is really accomplished. Has she ever held any concerts?
按: Accomplished 意指有成就.

B: yes. In April 2008, She performed one concerts
>>> B: Yes, she held one back in April 2008.

A: Hi,Ppeggy what are you looking at?
B: SHE is my idol,
A: your idol? Hum… she is very BEAUTIFUL, but I don’t recognize her. Is she Mary ??
B: no, she is Lily
A: OH, Lily, does she comeS form Hong Kong
B: no, SHE COMES from China
A: on! I see. She is a Chinese singer
B: yes!
A: WHICH SONG IS THE MOST FAMOUS SONG OF HER?
B: hum…SHE HAD many songs, and the most famous song is apple . Have you EVER HEARD OF IT???
A: yes. I have . I remembered that THIS SONG HAS GOT SOME PRIZES.
B: do you like it?
A: yes. I like it very much! HAS she ISSUE any CDS? 係只佢有冇出过唱片
B: yes. she has ISSUE more than three discs, and I also have two OF her CDS
A: SHE looks very young.IS SHE married?
B: yes
A:IT SEEMS LIKE I HAVE SEEN HER IN SOME MOVIES. HAVE SHE PARTICIPATED IN ANY MOVIE MAKING????
B: yes. SHE HAS PARTICIPATED IN SOME OF THEM.
A:SHE IS SO GREAT. Have She performed IN any concerts?
B: yes. In April 2008, She performed IN one CONCERT