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Many teenagers are smoking nowadays. We can notice teenagers holding cigarettes in the street, even though teenagers are in school uniform and they seem to be unseen. We know that smoking becomes rife in almost every country in these days. Smoking is just a momentary gratification to the teenagers. The menace of smoking can be fought as the following suggestions.

Some exhibitions can be organized to explain the dangers of smoking. Exhibitions should be held whether in schools or public. For example, it should include the photos of some smokers being sick after smoking and the short video of how the smokers are treated in the bad ways. Also, it is better if it is shown what cigarettes are included and the information of the dangers of smoking.

The Student Union in each school may organize an anti-smoking day. Some games should be held on the day, showing the benefits of not smoking. For example, there should be the Q&A game which is for teenagers to ask some questions related to the disadvantages of smoking and how to quit smoking. Also, there should be a seminar which is given a talk by professors, convincing teenagers of adverse effects smoking caused and providing the means to quit it.

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The Education and Manpower Bureau may hold an essay writing competition to promote the anti-smoking message. It is not restricted that only students could participate in.

2009-05-23 17:09:56 補充：
We know that smoking causes cancer and emphysema, and we know smoking kills and that we are playing roulette with our health.

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However, how many teenagers are really aware of the means to solve the problems?

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The writing competition would help teenagers think of the ways to quit and help other smokers. The prizes are needed to attract people to write.

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In conclusion, there are three suggestions have been made. Teenagers need to be aware of the effects so that they avoid the treatment like not being able to breath properly or not being satisfied, always feeling in need of something.

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Therefore, I would strongly recommend and suggest that the opinions will be used.

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2009-05-23 17:16:38 補充：
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2009-05-23 22:43:59 補充：
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Suggests to the teenager's smoking problem